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Open Poetry #48

Twilight (moonlight)

roomandboard
Junior Member

since 2011-12-21

Posts 13

0 posted 2013-08-20 10:20 PM

Night hiking through the last of the giant fields
deserted farm land in between brand new townhouse complexes
your new found Australian shepherd is herding us
charging ahead and circling back to make sure we’re coming.

The grass is up to our waists
we’re walking to walk.
Making daisy chains
testing butter cups under our chins
sucking honeysuckle
lightning bugs flicker

The twilight moon is already high in the sky
Our breath is white
it’s just a bit too cold out

We smoke and talk and shiver.
I keep looking at my watch and can’t concentrate
wishing I was home cuddled under blankets bingeing on junk food watching tv.
It’s been a bit too long with you today.
After we walk home and you leave, then I miss you.

Moonlight.
Finally – sleep.

paderewski
Member

since 2011-02-04

Posts 287
Louisiana, USA

1 posted 2013-08-21 07:27 AM

I like your style and your attention to details. Nice poetry.

~*~ Haunted French pancakes give me the crepes. ~*~

roomandboard
Junior Member

since 2011-12-21

Posts 13

2 posted 2013-08-21 08:37 AM

Thanks paderewski!

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

3 posted 2013-08-21 10:04 PM

It's hard to balance too much of a good thing. Sometimes we have to be reminded by absence our needs. Well said.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2013-08-21 11:13 PM

Nice...James

ken206573
Member

since 2008-10-14

Posts 487

5 posted 2013-08-23 01:41 PM

The flow was perfect and the visual was amazing. Simply enjoyed it.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

6 posted 2013-09-15 10:18 PM

This is great. Enjoyed the scenery.

poetically ghetto
Member

since 2004-01-20

Posts 100

7 posted 2013-09-16 02:32 AM

thanx for creating an image which took me away for a ride a smooth write

roomandboard
Junior Member

since 2011-12-21

Posts 13

8 posted 2013-09-17 08:38 PM

Thanks for all the compliments everyone!

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