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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest 
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Storming the rusted gates in a flourish of heart over heart, the trinkets of drizzle now flutter its aftermath seeking rewind to our Spring faint in voice, light is the murmer winds push at the leftover puddles in etchings lamenting a onetime frenzy, of this, our starcrossed affair all become cheap derivatives mere surrogates to throw the heart and mind into reverse from the once a upon a time of us [This message has been edited by EmmaRose (08-02-2013 09:53 AM).] |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
This is written so well, Emma, and so sad. The loves of our lives and the disappointments. That is why there are poets I believe, to record in verse the ills and hopelessness we felt at those times. ~*~ What do you call a dinosaur with a extensive vocabulary? A thesaurus. ~*~ |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
thank you for putting my poem into such perspective, yes, those once a upon a times haunt me randomly, but also bring the passion and inspiration I need to write, otherwise I'd draw too many blanks |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Your words seem to dance for me even if the topic is sad and the dance is mornful. Lori  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
This is powerful and reflective ..and so beautifully put into words. Excellent poem! |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow... you certainly have a way with words. Flat out poignant. Michael |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
Cute title it definitely made me want to read it! "faint in voice, light is the murmer winds push at the leftover puddles in etchings lamenting a onetime frenzy, of this, our starcrossed affair" I think I have been to where you are in this poem .... thumbs up! ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
I find this wistfully lovely,you write with words that seem preciously personal. Thank you. GRp |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Ah, those "once upon a time"....I have a love/hate relationship with them. Enjoyed this. -Trina |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
thank you kindly for reading me |
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