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of jaunty goes the dawn
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of jaunty goes the dawn |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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you were long gown velvet and bad word lovely those mornings before the dawn arrived and my eyes were tempted by that smile side like a sheba wind was disturbing solomans dust and those limbs of ebony rising, roses in shimmer how they glide some distant sighway sheathing as burgundy does the metal of your benzrolet and dawn sending her thicken along bayou wood you danced the glancers eyes with subtle charm long limbed of lithe, and blue jean gloving aristocratic with just a kiss flavor of jaunty before you exchanged whispers for stolen moments and gave second thoughts to what I had forgotten ______________ daark [This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (07-30-2013 05:57 AM).] |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Aren't you the jaunty one....So many great lines DS, kinda a skip to my lou kinda poem.  good stuff!! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Babyblue....thank you sexy ms |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
The last line? Slap! I felt it. I needed that though, because it woke me up. Also, your vocabulary floors me, this poem just melts together and gives my mind images I have never seen. I want to know what a sighway is, because it's going to stick in my mind forever now. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Aren't second thoughts worthy? Smiling.... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms Kaoru...thank you lady friend...a sighway is a pathway of sighs...like a highway one discovers that takes their words away and hides them...leaving only whisper sounds behind..(glad you asked?) ______________ Sweet Sun....thank you lady with smile eyes...you bless me |
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Shirley Knott New Member
since 2013-08-05
Posts 9state of confusion |
Daark You are impressive! I'm suprised you don't have more comments. SEK |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms Shirley...thank you |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
nice...James |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Thanks James |
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