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secondhanddreampoet
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0 posted 2013-07-28 04:31 PM


                Solitudes

What if in ones ‘inner world’
there are no definitive others,
only traces, shades, and shadows
unclearly seen as in the fogged glass
  of a broken mirror
or a mirage within a dream;
and ‘home’ is but a sad place,
a museum for how things
  ‘ought to be’
frozen as it was left when
shaped to needs and dreams
of the very last to go …
that piano which remembers
  all the old songs,
but can sing no more;
the vase of long-dead roses;
faded faces in dusty frames
now crooked on a peeling wall;
withered memories of the dead.

                 --- b. e. adams (7/28/13)


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Marchmadness
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1 posted 2013-07-28 04:47 PM


Wow! This is sure to add to my ponderings, Bruce.
                   Ida

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
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2 posted 2013-07-28 05:41 PM


You veered off your normal poetry with this one. A welcomed veering off in my opinion. I like the inner dialogue and the manner in which you put it all together. Thank you for this, I very much enjoyed.

~*~ Did you hear about the cross eyed teacher who lost her job because she couldn't control her pupils? ~*~

OwlSA
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Durban, South Africa
3 posted 2013-07-28 06:56 PM


I have said this so many times, about so many of your poems, Bruce, meaning it each time, but again, I am saying that, in my humble opinion, this is your chef-d'oeuvre of all your chef-d'oeuvres - and exquisite beyond exquisite beyond exquisite!

You have said that you find it difficult to write about personal reality, especially in the here and now - well, you can never say that again, after this!  It is good that you can now, and I am sure it was very cathartic to write and I hope you read it often, and see it in the light of its excellence, sensitivity, tremble-beauty, nostalgia and poignance.  I hope, for many reasons, you write more like this.

Owl

secondhanddreampoet
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4 posted 2013-07-29 10:08 AM


Thanks to each of you for your comments about this 'penning.'  It was simply an (all-to-real) impression about this house and property that I inherited.
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