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Kit McCallum

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0 posted 2013-05-09 05:11 PM

Senses of Your Loss

I saw a shimmer from the right,
A passing spark or trick of light;
It caught my eye, this happenstance,
And begged a second, fleeting glance.

I wondered, as I always do,
Could there be more? Could this be you?
I peered from left to right in hope
For just a glimpse to try and cope.

Elusively, the glimmer shone,
One moment there, another gone;
It left my wits a bit askew
As thoughts of you came rushing through.

Familiar senses brushed my mind
To gently guide in brief rewind;
As welcome sounds like symphonies
Arose within my memories.

The gentle nuance of your voice
Came back to make my heart rejoice;
Those subtle tones I loved to hear
For just a moment, lingered near.

As recollections gathered ground,
I savored every morsel found;
Consumed by thoughts of you I missed,
To fill me as I reminisced.

The subtle scents I knew of you
Came wafting up, and down, and through,
A fragrant momentary thrill
To bend my mind and thwart my will.

Perception blurred that slender line
Where truth and hope can misalign;
Yet in the wake of seconds passed,
I felt your gentle touch at last.

Intangible, though it may seem,
Your hug was sensed as if a dream . . .
For only you could comfort me
From heaven’s trail, in absentee.

Kit McCallum (Detering) 2013

JerryPat2
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1 posted 2013-05-09 05:40 PM

Oh, this is a keeper, Kit, and I will do so and revisit it from time to time. Such a beautiful theme and the rhyme was stupendous. Excellent! The special poem will be in my thoughts for days I have a feeling. Thank you for being poet enough to move me.

~*~ I stayed up all night to see where the sun went. Then it dawned on me. ~*~

Lighthousebob
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2 posted 2013-05-09 05:43 PM

You too hugged my heart with your poetic words as I thought of friends and loved ones gone before. Hoping you many more hugs and fond encounters to come. Thanks so much for sharing this.

Margherita
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3 posted 2013-05-09 05:45 PM

The rhymes flow so effortlessly and convey a deep harmony to your very poignant poem, dear Kit.

Love moves graciously through and in between your words and it is profoundly tangible.

Excellent.

Margherita

BluesSerenade
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4 posted 2013-05-09 09:19 PM

Your poetry is so meaningful and moving. You seem to find the goodness in all things, and yet your words leave me with both, a heavy heart and a sense of gladnesss.

Really nice to be reading you these days, Kit~

Marchmadness
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5 posted 2013-05-09 10:22 PM

What a beautiful poem, Kit. A keeper.

                                  Ida

Alison

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6 posted 2013-05-10 01:21 AM

I truly bask in your ability to write poems. Your flow, imagery and sheer talent slide over me as I read. Thank you for sharing your art - and allowing those like me to learn from you.

Hugs to you
Alison

Nan

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7 posted 2013-05-10 06:08 AM

I miss my mom too, Kit. How wonderful to see you write such a touching piece. I know she's there for you..

JamesMichael
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8 posted 2013-05-10 06:57 PM

Fine writing...James

Kit McCallum

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9 posted 2013-05-12 09:34 AM

JerryPat2: Thanks so much JerryPat, I really appreciate your thoughts.

Lighthousebob:  I’m glad you felt the hug Bob, thanks for letting me know.

Margherita:  Thank you for the lovely comment Margherita, much appreciated.

BluesSerenade:   You kind words are very much appreciated BluesSerenade, thank you.

Marchmadness:  I’m glad it’s a keeper, Ida, thank you.

Alison:  That was lovely to hear Alison, thanks so much.

Nan:  Me too Nan, me too. Thinking of you and sending a big hug.

JamesMichael:  Thanks so much James, for the kind words.

Much appreciated to all,

/Kit

suthern

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10 posted 2013-05-14 01:54 PM

My throat is tight and tears are ignoring my pleas not to fall. This flows beautifullly and rhymes divinely but mostly... it touches the heart of anyone who's ever lost and missed.

Mysteria

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11 posted 2013-05-14 11:26 PM

I almost heard her Kit. This was beautiful.

Kit McCallum

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12 posted 2013-05-17 03:07 PM

Suthern: Thank you for the lovely comment Ruth. I’m so glad to hear you were touched by this, thank you so much.

Mysteria: Thank you Sharon. There’s still a lot of days where I like to feel I can sense her. I tried to do this poem based on an exploration of the 5 senses (but hey, maybe it will lead me to a 6th sense!)

With much appreciation to you both,
/Kit

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