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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2013-05-09 07:09 AM

Let us play "Let's Pretend"
          To be so in love
          We fit like a glove
And we'll always blend.

"Let's Pretend" our days
          Are filled to the brim
          With joy, never grim
Our days be not gray.

When you look at me
          Your eyes caress skin
          And it makes me grin
You're my only she.

We'll never grow tired
          Of our love so dear
          The future is clear
And never expire.

The love that we share
          It will always be
          For we hold the key
To our lovely lair.

©April 25, 2013 / Jerry Pat Bolton

~*~ I stayed up all night to see where the sun went. Then it dawned on me. ~*~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2013-05-09 10:34 AM

I guess we never grow too old to play pretend. Thanks for the reminder Jerry.

lori

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2013-05-09 10:48 AM

Aw, you're welcomed Lori, and thank you for stopping by and commenting.

~*~ I stayed up all night to see where the sun went. Then it dawned on me. ~*~

Lighthousebob
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since 2000-06-14

Posts 4725
California

3 posted 2013-05-09 02:18 PM

Nice little short runs of rhyme here. Enjoyed!

(Having read a few of yours now, I'm thinking this one might have been a bit past your comfort level, maybe, but, hey, I thought you did really good with it.)

Kit McCallum

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since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
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4 posted 2013-05-09 02:45 PM

Much enjoyed this world you captured here JerryPat. A wonderful world without trouble and where love abounds, very nicely written.

Best wishes,
/Kit

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

5 posted 2013-05-09 02:56 PM

In other words, Bob, it stunk. Thanks for pointing that out.

~*~ I stayed up all night to see where the sun went. Then it dawned on me. ~*~

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

6 posted 2013-05-09 02:57 PM

I so appreciate your kind words concerning "Let's Pretend," Kit.

~*~ I stayed up all night to see where the sun went. Then it dawned on me. ~*~

Lighthousebob
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since 2000-06-14

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California

7 posted 2013-05-09 03:08 PM

LOL! (Hmmm, Maybe, but don't give up!)

Lighthousebob
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California

8 posted 2013-05-09 03:16 PM

"Let's Pretend"

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

9 posted 2013-05-09 03:20 PM

I don't plan on giving up Bob. I write my poems. I know I am not a great poet. I just write my poems. That is why I checked no critiques. To tell each other how the poem affected them is one thing, but to start critiquing when I have not opted for a critique . . . I like you, and I like your poetry. Sorry you find mine lacking.

~*~ I stayed up all night to see where the sun went. Then it dawned on me. ~*~

Lighthousebob
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since 2000-06-14

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California

10 posted 2013-05-09 03:32 PM

Thanks!

I like you and I like your poetry too and sorry for the critique.

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