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Puzzling it Out |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! 
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The river ice remains Thick in mid May And some worry About ice jams and floods Perhaps I could write About the black bottom Ice that floats to the top Like cream in a glass jar Of fresh cow’s milk I think of my Mother After gazing at pictures Of her smile My façade seems crooked As if it exposes the sadness That I tend to dismiss Every day, I think I miss her a bit more I know that poetry lives Still in my Mom Today I heard a voice I had heard before I ever heard it That sweet voice of friendship Those soothing tones of love Beckoned me closer And somehow showed me The poems that I dream Have been written And remain within me Each word is a piece of me - Alison |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
And your precious words, dear Alison, reach out and gather around me and touch me, allowing me to share your emotions. I can say only yes to what you express so beautifully here. On one side there is the pain for the physical loss, but on the other side you perceive your Mother's spirit and soul as it permeates your being and all the things and the poems and the dreams ... It was a privilege to read you this morning. Sending you all my love and big hugs. Margherita  |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Lovely, Alison, and so good to see you here again. The words may change as we grow but, yes, will certainly always be a part of the writer as will the memories of your mother always be part of you. Each time we think of those who have passed over we honour them. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
So glad to see you back ,Alison. Beautiful poem. Sending you hugs. Ida |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms Ali-san..your words are swallows you have taken of the free wind..and they become your poetry..enjoyed you ms |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
Excellent (as always) ! |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I feel this piece so completely Alison. You have captured your thoughts beautifully here. Very much enjoyed this.  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
It's as if your thoughts were taken straight from your mind to paper, Liberating! Free verse at its finest. Enjoyed! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You laid your heart out there, and it's just beautiful, Alison. I am sure you make your mother very proud. Lovely, you~ |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Dearest Margherita friend, Thank you. My Mom ... well, I don't really know how to express how much I love my Mom. She was so proud of every poem that I showed her - she ... I can't really say it, I can only feel it. She is forever my Mom. Alison - Helen, Thank you. I think of her a lot and I want others to get a feel for what an amazing woman she was (and continues to be). You have touched me. xoxo Alison - Ida, It's good to be back. Thank you for everything that is wonderful about you. Ali - Daark Man, I have missed you. It's good to read your poetry again and just share some thoughts. Ali-san - Bruce, Thank you. I look forward to going back and reading your poems that I have missed to date. Alison - Thank you, dear Kit. I am rusty, but my fingers want to write. And who am I to hold my fingers back? A - Bob, That is exactly what happened. I just wrote. It's kind of hard to start up again, but it helps to have friends like you cheering me on. Alison - Bluesy one, Thank you. Sometimes I feel like I am one walking exposed heart right now. It's good to "see" you again. Hugs to you, Alison |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
The way you describe your love of writing your poetry is felt deeply by many of us who can relate to this. I am happy that you had such a sweet relationship to your mom, who admired your beautiful words |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Dear ER, My heart thanks you. A |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
It is very emotional, both the grieving and the beautiful words your mother left and passed on to you. She will always remain alive within your loving heart, and that is exactly where she would long to be. A beautifully rendered examination of death and the rejuvenation of your fantastic mother. I loved this poem. ~*~ I stayed up all night to see where the sun went. Then it dawned on me. ~*~ |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Jerry, Thank you so very much. It's good to be here again. Alison |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
" Sometimes I feel like I am one walking exposed heart right now. " And that heart shines so brightly it almost supersedes the day, my friend... Wonderful write, jimmy |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I read this exquisite, quiver-sensitive, part of the portrait of Alison's heart yesterday, but didn’t have the words to express my reaction to this masterpiece, yet dewdrop gem – I still don’t (will tell you about Rambo, the dog I said I would tell you about when I am up to it), but didn’t want to wait any longer to say what a great work of art this is – poetry at its finest – yet, even more how sincere and real and how Alison (and that is a mega-compliment for any poem) it is. Wol |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Jimmy and Diana, Thank you, my friends, for caring about me so deeply that you care about my Mom too. It's a very special thing - this friendship that I share with you both. I have laughed with you and cried with you also ... thank you for doing the same with me. All my friendship and love, Alison |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
The poems that I dream Have been written And remain within me Each word is a piece of me You start off with such a stunning image... and end with beautiful intimacy... and weave your word tapestry with such love. In your responses, you said you wanted us to know what an amazing woman your Mom was. We do, sweet lady... because your wonderful heart and talented pen have made us love both mother and daughter. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Such a lovely, sensitive poem, I just had to read it again, Alison. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice...James |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
"Each word is a piece of me" and a piece of your mom, Alison. Enjoyed your heartfelt and loving poetry. Ms. E |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Alison, those are precious memories to have... those you cannot just see in mind, but still hear as well. They ARE part of you, as you have puzzled through, and that thought alone might just start the thawing process on that May ice you're experiencing. I'm sorry I couldn't reply to this sooner, but my puter time is really limited these days. Even so, I did read this and your "Mother's Day Card" poem and was touched by both. ((Hugs)) to you. Michael |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Ruth, Thank you. It was really just a piece about a period of time and my feelings. You were the last stanza. I wrote this after we talked and I was thinking about what a true pleasure it was to hear your voice. Love you, lady ~ Alison - Ida, thank you. You make me smile when I read your comment. You are a very special PiP friend to me. xoxox Alison - James, thank you. A lot. A - Ms E ~ Thank you. I believe if we share those who have moved on - they continue to live in all of us. Thank you for making room in your heart for my Mom. Alison - Michael, thank you for taking the time to read my poems and make a comment on them. I really appreciate you taking the time - you, also, have touched me. Alison |
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