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Open Poetry #48

Her long brown hair

KentAshbyKorb
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since 2013-05-05

Posts 99
Nc USA

0 posted 2013-05-05 07:09 PM

Her brown locks
are like long lands
where trees in the breeze rock.
Like these trees, her hair,
the winds hands mock.

I too love to trace
my fingers through her fine hair lace
placed perfectly like a frame
around her fair face.

Kit McCallum

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since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

1 posted 2013-05-06 01:50 PM

Lovely alliteration and internal rhyme KentAshbyKorb. I enjoyed the soft and gentle flow in this very much.

Best wishes,
/Kit

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

2 posted 2013-05-06 02:13 PM

lovely, sensuality in hair has great intensity, thanks for sharing gracefully,
yann

Lighthousebob
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since 2000-06-14

Posts 4725
California

3 posted 2013-05-07 01:57 PM

With so much rhyme it can be difficult to keep a poem sensual, but you did it! Enjoyed!

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