Open Poetry #48 |
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I Still Feel You |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere ![]() |
I still feel you though the distance between us feels so thick and heavy only an emotional machete could clear a way to reach each other again… I talk to you about nothings and hear about everythings I avoid your irritable and wait with love and lonely I feel your fear and dodge your bullets I share your helpless and bite my tongue I try to comfort and suffer your rebuff I moon around your world of hurt gravity pulls at my parts washed out with the tide I see your lunacy and think of mine… I share your burden and cry by myself I still feel you not feeling me at all |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
So very, very sad. ~*~ I know a guy who's addicted to brake fluid. He says he can stop any time. ~*~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Thank you for your kindness Jerry. I appreciate you being here. lori |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
The lopsidedness, the heaviness of your mooning around his lunacies and causing your own, the nothings that your's are considered vs the everythings of his, OMG! Jerry got it absolutely right! Very Good Poetry, sooooooo Good, Deeply Emotional, Enjoyed! ![]() |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
LHBob- thank you for seeing the poetry despite the saddness. It'd be nice if it could always be roses... but sometimes you have to fertilize the flowers...Either they will grow like crazy or you burn 'em up... If you don't do anything they can just shrivel up and die... Thanks for the read. lori ![]() |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...I have someone I always feel whether she is close or far...James |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Thanks James, I appreciate you words. lori ![]() |
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MICHELMAS Member
since 2012-02-15
Posts 305Lancashire England |
so sad, and so clear the feelings Michael |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Yes, I spilled a little blood on the paper with this one. Thanks for commenting. lori |
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