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If I Placed a Sparrow...
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If I Placed a Sparrow... |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
If I Placed a Sparrow... If I placed a sparrow onto yours, my lover's sill, would the warbler sing a melody or hush within your still as it peers into your window at the peace found on your face that could halt the course of heaven and make enemies embrace or, if I placed a sparrow onto yours, my lover's bed, would the feathered wing a pirouette or tranquil be instead as might mesmerized a flower be when first it sees the dawn and the golden dreams of sunlight streams recede into your yawn or, if I placed a sparrow onto yours, my lover's grasp, would the frightened wriggle until death or breathe a lowly gasp most assured by quintessential smile that warms the deepest sea like the warmth of Serengeti warms giraffes that stretch for leaves. [This message has been edited by Lighthousebob (04-06-2013 01:27 PM).] |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Be careful, if you place a sparrow in your possession be wary that she doesn't train it to have falcon's heart and stamina of a great bald eagle on send it searching the skies and low ground for the man who would turn her gentle nature into a blood-thirsty eagle. ~*~ I tried to catch some fog. I mist. ~*~ |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Thanks Jerry... Yeah, I warred within myself today with this one not to make it a comedy ... but, um, fortunately, I guess, I kept it a romantic kind of poem. At first, I had her 'crushing' the damn bird at the end. I guess that's part of the therapeutic side of poetry ... Self control that you might benefit others who are reading. I guess. Anyways, thanks for your insight. I do, however, like the idea of incorporating 'a blood thirsty eagle' into the poem somehow.  |
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Sue_s Junior Member
since 2013-03-26
Posts 45 |
Ack!!!! Don't you change a word! It's lovely just as it stands. Sue |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Hey, Sue... Yeah, that's kinda the thing I figured the opposite gender might say, soooooo, yeah, I probably won't add the 'blood thirsty eagle' in there and, also, thanks a lot for your "Ack!!!!" confirmation. It means a lot! It does! Big Smiles! |
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