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The Dream
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The Dream |
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Sue_s Junior Member
since 2013-03-26
Posts 45 |
The Dream Last night I had a dream.. a dream that seems so real I still can smell the air from it and just the way it feels I was walking along a road.. a road I do not know The sun was setting quickly and I knew not where to go I felt another presence... but one could not be seen I somehow knew that "it" was there my senses were so keen When out of the dark stepped a wolf a wolf with eyes of blue No fear came upon me... I knew he was sent by you My calmness so unnerved him.. but suddenly he smiled And looked me directly in the eye and said, "sit and rest awhile" I did just as he asked.. what else was I to do I knew there was no danger since, he was sent by you He layed upon my lap I slowly stroked his head And when I thought he was fast asleep this is what he said "Be cautious of The Vampyre.. be leary of his ways Do not let him in your heart once there, it's where he stays" I didn't have to answer.. he looked me in the eye And as he stared back at me he licked the tear I cried He told me that he knew... he saw inside my soul And that your scent was in me a scent he knew from old I told him I was shameless.. I told of letting you in I told him of the darkness that I treasure now within I told him of the longing.. I told of how I need I told him all our secrets about the way you made me bleed All the while he sat there quietly.. all the while, he never moved When he sensed that I was finished he turned to me, with eyes of blue "If you love him, love him madly.. give him all, you have to give If you do this he will bless you with the life, you long to live" With that said.. we walked on.. paw in hand..beneath the moon Neither talking, only feeling it was clear, he loved you too At that moment I awakened... though I really know not why But I swear I heard a howling cutting through the night and sky Still today, the dream is in me.. still today it feels so real Still today, my heart beats faster wondering what the dream reveals. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Aw Sue, this is so enchanting and so different from any vampire poem/story I have ever read. Your rhyming was fantastic, your story/plot tender and real. This poem is the stuff legend are born from. ~*~ I changed my iPod name to Titanic. It's syncing now. ~*~ |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Beautifully rendered piece here. Love him madly, indeed! There really isn't any other way. Michael |
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Sue_s Junior Member
since 2013-03-26
Posts 45 |
Thank you JerryPat for your more than kind review. "The Dream" has a very special place in my heart for a few reasons. It really was a "dream" poem that I wrote upon waking with this in my head, and the vampyre has taken up permenant residence in my heart along with his blue eyed wolf. I'm so pleased that you also enjoyed it. Thanks. Sue |
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Sue_s Junior Member
since 2013-03-26
Posts 45 |
Thank you Michael for taking the time to read and respond. You're right, if you're going to love..do it madly! Thanks, Sue |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I love mad love ~ and I really enjoyed your poem. Looking forward to reading more of them. Alison PS - Sending you a warm welcome to PiP. |
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LorienLord Member
since 2013-02-03
Posts 55Wisconsin USA |
I believe this most beautiful poem has "opened the door" for V. |
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Sue_s Junior Member
since 2013-03-26
Posts 45 |
Thank you Alison. Both for the warm welcome and the read. Greatly appreciated. We women are a sucker for mad love, huh? Always the romantics. Think you're ready for The Dream II? Thanks Sue |
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Sue_s Junior Member
since 2013-03-26
Posts 45 |
LL,my sweet, You are so very wrong. It was your posting of "V" that "opened the door" for "THE DREAM." Thank you darlin. Sue |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
"I told him of the longing.. I told of how I need I told him all our secrets about the way you made me bleed" GREAT first post, I havent been on here in over year and I am glad I stopped in to read this oen!!! Welcome to pip!!! ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
quote: Like a repetitive theme to a story or movie or something, this stanza really sticks out for me and, also, I like the love triangle that's going on here. Very, very intriguing. Enjoyed!  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sue, a fine rendition! Welcome to Passions! Please, check your email for a Very Special Welcome! "The business of the poet...is to show the sorriness underlying the grandest things and the grandeur underlying the sorriest things." Thomas Hardy |
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Sue_s Junior Member
since 2013-03-26
Posts 45 |
Angel,L.H Bob, and Sunshine, Thank you all for such a warm response and welcome to the group. It warms my heart to have others enjoy this piece. "V" and "Blue" are two of my all time favorite 'people.' Sue |
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