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Open Poetry #48

Sweet Thoughts

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

0 posted 2013-03-13 06:51 PM

Sweet thoughts softly embrace her heart
with the whispering winds
of another time;

When the sweet scent of red roses
blended with wet dew of the morn;
and flawless skin meant to be touched
affectionately and not scorned.

When the allure of sweet perfume
cast a spell in the midnight air;
and the heart swelling with passion,
while moonlight cascades down her hair.

Sweet thoughts softly embrace her heart
with the whispering winds
of another time.
He desired poetry of free verse,
but she desired poetry of rhyme.

~Victoria~

I was adored once too.
William Shakespeare

[This message has been edited by Victoria (03-13-2013 09:19 PM).]

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2013-03-13 08:02 PM

. . . and therein was the problem as I see it . . . by free verse meant he could play it anyway he desired, but she was bound by rhyming rules she could not break . . .

~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways . . . ~*~

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

2 posted 2013-03-13 08:19 PM

Yes he liked his freedom and she liked being a couplet so to speak.Thank you dear Jerry.

~Victoria

I was adored once too.
William Shakespeare

MorningStar
Member

since 2009-10-26

Posts 290
Pittsburgh, Pa

3 posted 2013-03-13 10:10 PM

I really enjoyed this. It's really very graceful. And maybe a little bitter sweet...

"I'll tell you how the sun rose
A ribbon at a time..." - Emily Dickinson

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2013-03-14 12:46 PM

Interesting...I like both...nice romantic writing...James

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

5 posted 2013-03-14 08:30 AM

Thank you MorningStar for your nice comments and I love that name.

James...Thank you as always for your visit.
Appreciate your nice comments.

~Victoria

I was adored once too.
William Shakespeare

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