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The Unanswered in Confusion
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The Unanswered in Confusion |
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voice2bheard Senior Member
since 2007-10-19
Posts 591New York |
So this is where the end of the day leaves me So condescending & deceiving A wrath which you hold until the bitter end Without one shred of light, or a true friend What was the point of such a birth When death quickly follows in its disperse Truth over rated followed quickly by lies Always looked down upon, by such dreadful eyes Words to say, but noone who will listen What was once a beating heart, now caved in To find one self back in the same position Of what once was considered hell, now to be lived in Do you not see whats happening anymore? Things are far worse, than they ever were before Things that were once a tradition, now unheard of Tragedy and death, seems several can't get enough Tears that have fallen, now creating such a sin Blood that once flowed, now stops giving in Scandals amongst rumors, Betrayal amongst lies Noone ever seems to be fully satisfied Will they wait until you're gone to say the truth How they really feel, what they'll speak about you When will the pain and suffering ever be resolved? Questions unanswered, that will remain unsolved Noone knows where to start or where to begin Thats just how it is, in this world we live in People put things on hold, but never follow through Several always mistake the lies with the truth Why to bring children into the world When only later they will follow Living there short years Then to be buried under the hollow? As thoughts have been invaded slowly over time What is it truely, that now posesses the mind? This never ending circle, constantly on repeat That thrives us into insanity, no longer to be seen When you ask yourself what you want with your life Is it the predictable answers, ones that aren't right? Love, a job, a family; fame, fortune, individuality Trust, a home, peace, war, a cure, succes, or is there so much more? So many questions that will remain unanswered Followed by the lies,to temporarily replace them Learn to hold your tongue, if you don't know the situation Its better to know all the facts, before making up your own stipulations Just because you think its right doesn't mean others will Learn to have an open mind, an understanding, don't go in for the kill Somewhere, out there in the world, I would hope someone reads this tonight Somewhere, out there it may just so happen to save someones life That is not this poems necessary reason As to give the reader an understanding, perhaps even please them To let others know that they are not alone For someone to relate to what was written on my own Hopefully one day, someone will learn to appreciate The things given in life and to know that it wasn't a mistake So as a knife is being made, or a gun being loaded You should know you're not alone, noone chose it As being conflicted between whats wrong and whats right To wonder if death is the answer, or perhaps maybe just living the remainder of your life Kate |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Many gems to reflect upon and ponder, voice2bheard, and it would do us individually, as well as globally if we were to adhere to these truisms. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways . . . ~*~ |
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voice2bheard Senior Member
since 2007-10-19
Posts 591New York |
Thank you! Agreed of course! |
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loudsilence New Member
since 2013-03-12
Posts 6Atlanta, Georgia, USA |
Amazing the incredible growth from the March 2009! You're clarity and vigor have increased exponentially. |
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loudsilence New Member
since 2013-03-12
Posts 6Atlanta, Georgia, USA |
So I know nothing about poetry--in scholarly sense--and I probably messed everything up, so I won't be offended if you tell me to go jump off a cliff--but I've spent the past hour reading and editing your poem. Probably very presumptios of me, but I was very moved by your poem and only wished to feel the words flow through my finger tips. So here's what I did. If you'd like to go over it more, let me know--I notice some minor things. So this is where the end of the day leaves me, condescending & deceiving. A wrath which you hold until the bitter end, without one shred of light— without one true friend. What was the point of such a birth when death quickly follows in its wake? Truth you overrate and cover quickly with lies, always looking down upon me with those dreadful eyes Words to say, but no one willing to listen what was once a beating heart now collapsed-- broken condition Finding myself back in the same position of what once was considered hell, now begrudgingly I live. Do you not see what’s happening anymore? Things are far worse than they have ever been before. Things that were once a tradition, now unheard of Tragedy and death, seems several can't get enough Tears that have fallen in torrent now creating such a sin; Blood that once flowed now stops feeding in. Scandals amongst rumors, Betrayals between lies-- no one ever seems to be fully satisfied. (my favorite line) Will they wait until you're gone to speak the truth— how they really feel? What horrors they will speak about you. When will the pain and suffering ever be resolved? Questions unanswered, that will remain unsolved. No one knows where to start or where to begin That’s just how it is, in this world we live in. People put things on hold, but never follow through, Often mistaking lies for the truth. Why bring children into the world to only later turn them back. Living there (do you mean 3 or their?) short years before found buried under the hollow? The thoughts have been invaded slowly over time, so what is it now that truly possesses the mind? This never ending circle runs constantly on repeat, it spins us out into insanity—gone, no longer to be seen. When you ask yourself what you want with your life is it the predictable answers that aren't right? Love, a job, a family? Fame, fortune, your individuality? Peace, war, a cure, success, a home? Trust? Something infinitely much more? So many questions will remain unanswered, and lies will shadow as a temporarily replacement. Learn to hold your tongue, if you don't know the situation. It’s better to know all the facts, before making up your own stipulations. Just because you think it's right doesn't mean others will. Learn to have an open mind, be more understanding. Don't go blind in for the kill when really you’re the one who needs the judgment of your will. Somewhere, out in the world, I hope someone reads this tonight; (I took would out because I think you really do wish this) somewhere, out there, it may just so happen to save a life. That was not my poem’s initial purpose-- to give the reader an understanding— or perhaps even please them; (I’m very pleased actually) to let others know that they are not alone-- or to find someone who relates to something I wrote on my own Hopefully one day someone will learn to appreciate the things they’ve been given in life, and to know that it’s not some mistake. So as a knife is being made or a gun being loaded across a vast global stage, know you are not alone-- no one can choose it. As being conflicted between what’s wrong and what’s right to wonder if death is the answer, or perhaps maybe just living the remainder of your life. |
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voice2bheard Senior Member
since 2007-10-19
Posts 591New York |
LOUD SILENCE YOU NEED TO REMOVE WHAT YOU WROTE NOW! PLAGERISM!!!!! & IT NEEDS TO BE REMOVED AT ONCE!! YOU DON'T EVER COPY SOMEONES WORK IN A POST & REPLACE IT WITH YOUR OWN!!! Kate |
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