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LorienLord Member
since 2013-02-03
Posts 55Wisconsin USA |
Please let me color your page that others left blank for love is not always black and white some hearts will always need to be drawn outside the lines. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Very inspirational and neat thinking to come up with this. By inspirational I don't mean in the religious sense, but in the sense of love not finished . . . Enjoyed very much . . . ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. Needs two more lines . . . . |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
nicely and correctly put, my friend ... and some will always stay outside the lines. j. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Certainly like the "feel" of this. I'm not sure of the suggestion of two more lines unless it's referring to a particular poetic form. I've been away from "specific parameters" of poetic style that I feel at a loss. The poem feels finished to me mainly because of the last two lines. I really like the idea of an offer to provide color to another's black and white page. The offer has an effervescent quality. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Very very nice, LaurienLord! Margherita |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
more lines and more colors, i guess, thanks for the exquisite share, yann |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Yes, very nice. A |
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