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Petticoats and poppies
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Petticoats and poppies |
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MICHELMAS Member
since 2012-02-15
Posts 305Lancashire England 
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Petticoats and poppies The mists of time, swirled around, gnarled branches of the oak Each vapour trail a tongue to tell, of their secrets past Where once they lay on mossy banks, beneath the dappled light The modesty of petticoats, unfurled like blossoms in the sun Spring flowers nodding in the breeze of things unknown to come And foreign fields will soon become, a piece of England torn So many men, few summers then, for them to play as boys Once bugles blew, now trumpets sound, for youth that’s lost again She sits alone, as acorns fall, the past within the rings And somewhere far her letters read, tranquil beneath the shells With one last look, she’ll turn away, petticoats now smooth as silk Her wedding gown in camphor hangs the future now the past Into the stream she blew a kiss, his lips to touch as rain And where he lay, a tear did fall, and poppies grew again |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Now, either I am fragile this morning or you are a master in tugging at heartstrings ... Both guesses are true ... your words are beyond beautiful, Michelmas. An absolutely outstanding excellent write. Margherita "Love is the One who masters all things; |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Beautiful words and I love the title too Michael...  I love every line.~Victoria Love is a smoke made with the fume of sighs. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Wonderfully written, my friend. j. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
This is a heart-tugging piece of writing, Michael. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Your vocabulary choices are exquisite; they ad a lovely Victorian flavor to this piece. The text of it pulls the reader onward and through it relentlessly. Loved the read. I am wondering, though, is this a particular style where you use commas instead of line breaks to create separation and enhance the cadence of your words? I haven't seen a lot of poetry in this particular era you've depicted, at least as I've interpreted it, but I don't believe I've seen the use of commas to create the feel of line breaks, w/o using them. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, I'll seek the lighthouse evermore. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
An offering from a master poet, Michael. Ida |
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MICHELMAS Member
since 2012-02-15
Posts 305Lancashire England |
Thanks for your generous comments. Vas I don't really have a 'style', it varies from poem to poem. I do like rhyme and many of my poems are precise in their rhythm.Not really a technician, usually a poem comes from one or two lines and then just happens,I do like sonnets though. This one tends to break away from my usual style, having extra syllables in some lines, the commas then break the line..however I do not think about this, I just write. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
I liked this very much cool write. Where are you from in Lancs. I'm originally from near Chorley but now live in Iowa. Is this heaven? |
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MICHELMAS Member
since 2012-02-15
Posts 305Lancashire England |
thanks again for the comments. Olias, hometown is Greenmount Bury, close to Holcombe Brook and Ramsbottom. A number of poems have a historic reference to this area, Satanic mills, and the moors and the like. Michael |
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