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Open Poetry #48

Challenge by VAS

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

0 posted 2013-01-27 08:13 AM

The wings of a dove
from treetops to mountaintops
Peace in the valley.

http://apod.nasa.gov/apod/ap130126.html

Challenge Poem.

[This message has been edited by Victoria (01-27-2013 09:06 AM).]

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2013-01-27 08:18 AM

Excellent, beautiful haiku, dear Victoria, and challenge perfectly met!

Love your interpretation of the Nasa picture!

Margherita

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

2 posted 2013-01-27 08:37 AM

Thank you so much Margherita...it was fun...I can't wait to read yours...HUGSS

~Victoria

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2013-01-27 09:15 AM

Very well done, Victoria, capturing the picture in meter perfect style.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

4 posted 2013-01-27 10:00 AM

Thank you so much Jerry...I like challenges. Glad you enjoyed.

~Victoria

RedStoneEB
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since 2003-06-08

Posts 772
uk

5 posted 2013-01-27 10:59 AM

I alway loved this form of poetry finding such wisdom in such few lines to paint a picture a thousand times the length.

RS

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

6 posted 2013-01-27 11:13 AM

Wonderful, Victoria. You've said so much in so few letters, especially contrasted to the trap I made for myself.

Re. Haiku every time I try one, someone says I've missed the form badly. It seems I have no trouble with the syllable count, it's that requirement of that final line where I lose the ability to cope, it seems.

You've done superbly, methinks.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

7 posted 2013-01-27 11:40 AM

Thank you RS and V. I really should do more of these haikus..They are fun. Helps with the writers block.

~Victoria

Love is a smoke made with the fume of sighs.
William Shakespeare

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