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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2013-01-04 01:06 PM

Sun clings to skin as if it would be
a lover not ever to leave
and impales mind, body and soul
onto a deep and intense lethargy.

It’s in this state that no one can say
whether alive or dead
but there is a shift of consciousness
that brings relief from the heat.

Rise up, rise up, and so she does
divested of lovers and sun
to stand as a woman alone
in the shade of this mortal life.

Upright awake yet she would be
back in the arms of glorious sleep
where the world a thing of the past
and a lover’s touch cool waters.

Not to be, not to be, but let her not be
forever impaled by lethargy
that floats her on a beautiful dream
then crashes her on to reality’s rocks.

Sun clings to skin but only for now
because like love and a true lover
it will leave the mind, body, soul,
alone in this mortal life!

Helen / 4 January 2013

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

1 posted 2013-01-04 03:36 PM

Really enjoyed how you wrote this!! The short lived warmth of the sun, and how it moves in and out of the shade.

Somewhere in the mix is a comfort zone, but finding it is tricky part.

Ain't that just like a lover!!  xoxo

Hugs, honey~

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

2 posted 2013-01-04 04:35 PM

I like this Honeybunch. You described it to a tee. Nicely done.

~Victoria

Love is a smoke made with the fume of sighs.
William Shakespeare

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

3 posted 2013-01-05 01:50 AM

Thanks Bluesy gal and Victoria. Gosh, don't you just hate those "tricky parts"?

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

4 posted 2013-01-09 04:37 AM

Thought provoking write, Helen. So well understood.
Ida

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

5 posted 2013-01-09 08:25 AM

"Upright awake yet she would be
back in the arms of glorious sleep
where the world a thing of the past
and a lover’s touch cool waters."

Intense, almost tiring... I drug myself
along, but this verse was a bit of relief.
Love this write.

Very expressive!!

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

6 posted 2013-01-09 10:36 PM

Wow, I think the title alone could have been the whole poem.

Wonderful read my friend.

j.

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

7 posted 2013-01-09 11:16 PM

Thank you Ida, JL, and Jimmy, for your kind comments. Much appreciated. The sun is high again today and there'll be no chance to sleep it away but when it's gone I'll live again.

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