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wayward dreams of the western snow
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wayward dreams of the western snow |
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Tomer Senior Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168Michigan |
He had thinly layered brown hair soft cheeks that spoke like pebbles that faced inward towards the lake white in their shade rather slender, but never frail Cautious under a moons kindred light His hands moved in the ways of the wind until his feet followed just off the cape of the jersey south He use to say his fathers prayer under his breath for the lonesome road, the western shell of a farmers land always left him longing for more A fathers prayer a backpack with a letter that lay stowed away in the front zip pocket He had his hands under the pockets of the wind the picket signs that raced down the rural roads for his mind chased towards another seldom fall winter, easing behind him, lay its tracks on his backside until he found a place to sit and watch the empty roads dreams look inside him. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Tomer, I absolutely LOVED this masterpiece, the first time I read it, and more with each reading - I don't seem to be able to stop re-reading it. It encapsulates the essence of my most favourite subjects (Nature) and my favourite poem (Ma Bohème) of one of my very, very favourite French poets (Arthur Rimbaud). I don't have time to come into Pip often - and for many reasons, I am SO glad I didn't miss this one, so rich in quiver-detail - I see, hear, smell, feel, touch it all, and it is so exquisitely expressed. Whew! Well done! Owl |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Enjoyed this my friend. Was right there! j. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You create such a vivid scene and give us a glimpse into the minds of your characters. I think that is wonderfully unique poetry in motion. Love your style, Tomer~ |
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Tomer Senior Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168Michigan |
Owl- As usual, your comments always leave me with a smile. I don't think my writing is worthy, but I appreciate the comments, nonetheless. Happy it resonated with you so much. Take care Cheers Tomer |
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Tomer Senior Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168Michigan |
J- Appreciate the love. Happy you enjoyed....take care Cheers Tomer |
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Tomer Senior Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168Michigan |
Blues- Appreciate the kind words - happy you could see the story begin to unfold from beginning to end. Hope you're well. Cheers Tomer |
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