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Wind Chill |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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Fog clouds the air draping the sky in a thin veil breathing warm vapor settles in a slow swirl the wind chill slides across my neck as an unexpected upsweep flutters deep in the heart and my lips long for your damp touch pressed against the down folded between the warmth of embers where a slow burn strokes a dream on fire soft whispers fall like snow flakes as the mountains peak in the evening hush slow dancing in the winter wind frozen in time. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Beautiful words just like I remember Lori. Nice to read you again. I talked to Maureen a while back. Hoping she starts writing again too. ~V~ Love: A temporary insanity curable by marriage. by Ambrose Bierce |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Hey you!! Thanks for stopping by and for your kind reply. I am so happy you remember me, so glad you're back. xo |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Wow, such compelling verses on one's thoughts, a dreamy sleepwalk, or a great wintry evening at the shore. Very nice writing!! Mesmerizing... "where a slow burn strokes a dream on fire soft whispers fall like snow flakes as the mountains peak in the evening hush slow dancing in the winter wind frozen in time." Enjoyed JL  Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you most kindly JL~ I really loved your reply, winter by the shore. Yes! That's it!!! Good wishes to you, always~ |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Beautiful, Bluesy. Writing that sets the mind to wandering and then to wonder if one should go a-wandering! |
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ken206573 Member
since 2008-10-14
Posts 487 |
Sweet, wonderful and inviting. I love your poem, each and every line. Happy Holidays! |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Sweetness and effortless beauty. Just about makes me fall in love with winter, my least favorite season, so good on you. Great write. "I will hang on the hook of your splendor" -Snow Patrol, 'Dark Roman Wine' |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I really like that 'dream on fire'. Nicely done. Takes me somewhere I haven't been in far too long. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Mmmm, what a lovely scene to lose yourself in. This was beautiful. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Haha, thanks for your cute reply Helen. Made me smile you did. Happy Holidays to you too, Ken. Thank you so much for stopping by to read my poem. soul drifter~ I am so pleasantly surprised when I see your name under my work. I so appreciate the fact that you were here. Best of the season to you. Nan~ Glad my poem could take you there. Thanks for the visit. Michael~ Thank you for the beautiful, that means alot. I'm so happy you stopped by to read me. Good wishes to you. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Considering the title, I didn't expect my heart to be warmed - but it was. Beautiful work! |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Lovely poem, Blues. Warms up winter. ida |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Delicious...James |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thanks to you, suthern gal, Idam and James, for your warm and delicious replies. Season's greetings to you, and many blessings in the New Year. |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Reading your words always relaxes and sooths,this poem is gently sensuous but unmistakenly bluesy at her best,enjoyed the read as usual....thank you... Goldenrose. music was my refuge.i could crawl into the spaces between the notes and curl my back to loneliness - Maya Angelou |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thanks! Glad to know you were here, Goldenrose~ |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
as wonderful as always Lori, hoping you're having a wonderful holiday season.. |
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mellowdown Junior Member
since 2012-12-19
Posts 30usa |
A lovely rhythm as though a waltz was playing softly, I really enjoyed, "as an unexpected upsweep flutters deep in the heart", |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Aww Richy, you always take me by surprise!! It's not quite as blue around here without you. (I mean that in a good way, like true blue) Merry Christmas to you and many blessings in the New Year. mellowdown~ Thanks for reading my poem, and welcome to the blue sea. Hope you can stay awhile and get comfortable. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"slow dancing in the winter wind frozen in time." All of it was just beautiful and written with such tenderness, Lor. So nice to read you again. M |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Aww, this is as sensuous as it gets, Blue. Dynamite poetry!!! ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Stunning imagery in this beauty, dear Lori. Margherita |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
This surely warms the ice off the frozen water. A sweet daydream on a cold afternoon here |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
To each one of you, thank you so much for your nice comments. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
"the wind chill slides across my neck as an unexpected upsweep flutters deep in the heart " What a beautiful train of words, my friend. They give me hope that one day maybe my own mightslide so well before the eyes. Loved the whole piece, but those . . . well, inspire. jimmy |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Wow, all I can say . Really liked this one, great write. I'm in awe. |
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LorienLord Member
since 2013-02-03
Posts 55Wisconsin USA |
A beautifully descriptive, sensuous poem. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Wow, you all humble me. Thank you for reading and keeping this poem alive. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Softly beautiful with subtle images created by your words. I really like this. A |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
VERY fine writing !! |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
VERY fine writing !! |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Any time spent by a seaside will surely uncover this all-embodying phenomenon called fog and you’ve surely given it much character here in your poem. Enjoyed! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
A, DP and Bob~ Thank you so much for leaving me your nice replies. Yup, the fog isn't all bad, so long as it lifts now and then, like the upsweep. It's exhillarating! Thanks again~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Ah . . . after another read, think I'll shine the light on it again... jimmy |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'where a slow burn strokes a dream on fire' Love the lines, Lori Bell Good to read you, again. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You are so sweet jw. Thank you for that. Oh man....you can't go sneakin' up on me like that Duncan.....ya get me all shook up. Thanks goob!!! |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
It's so nice reading you again. It's been a very long time. And wow, love this poem I kind of drifted off into my own little fantasy world, lol. |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
Very inspiring .... i can see nature popping off the page with your words ,,,, loved it!!!! ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you ladies. Glad to see both of you on the blue pages again. |
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