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Rending Rachel
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Rending Rachel |
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Ethern Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 150on a plane 
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the breaking point her fragile heart: the fracture aches with pain, weeps bleeding tears from unhemmed scars that ink her lovers name, behind the wall she mourns in white: her bride's gown crimson-stained. her injured soul- her broken dreams- in pieces will remain. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
That is a sad one. Nicely done though. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Very painful write. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very descriptive brings me back to old feelings |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Heart rending. Lovely flow to it though. Enjoyed much. Michael |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
i could feel the shattered heart here |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
A heart-breaker, for sure. Very well written. JL  Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
very nice writing...though very sad as well |
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