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#3. something tells me
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#3. something tells me |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813
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prayers for the reasons why #3. something tells me ok I would start I say to no one in particular but fear has made me hesitate probably unfounded you would say you have not started anything new in years so what do you know about fear? but fear I reitterate I built this wall and such a massive thing it is I built this wall and must have done it in my sleep for I can't remember slipping even one stone into its slot so yes I fear and now if I remove the stones where shall I place them will I simply be repositioning my hiding place? but no something tells me I must start and so I trace the wall with words seeking a weakness Lord help me lest these tears stifle my good intentions I need a starting place [This message has been edited by luminosity (11-02-2012 05:29 PM).] |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
You did a lot of repeating in this poem. I guess it is the fear that makes you so insecure you have to double-talk. Tear down that damnable walk stone by stone. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
lol it was supposed to be about half as long, guess I somehow superimposed a paste on a paste? and lol the next in the series is 'stone by stone' however as of yet, the title sits by itself on the page |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
The title will grow and with growth . . . confidence. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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r v wooo Senior Member
since 2007-08-07
Posts 656 |
Loved the poem...and Jerry's comments make a lot of sense. RV |
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r v wooo Senior Member
since 2007-08-07
Posts 656 |
Will read the other posts you have written...and there are many...that is good, in that it will help me...to understand...you. RV |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
r...thank you for reading, my writing is almost without exception totally honest, for my words I feel are God given, and if I am not going to be honest, why write...so yes if you want to find 'me' read what I have written I have been at PIP almost since its beginning, though have changed my name more than a few times...sigh |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Fear does hold one back but then again it can protect you from the night. As they say nothing to fear but fear itself. Enjoyed your words. ~V~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I say ... take the stones from the wall, lay them on the ground, and build a pathway from me to you....  |
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