Love is fire, life is a forge.

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Open Poetry #48

Love is fire, life is a forge.

Pweisbrod
Junior Member

since 2011-10-14

Posts 27

0 posted 2012-10-30 11:29 PM

Sometimes,

The past drifts up in my mind,
a candle-powered hot air balloon
And I remember the twisting of our bodies
like two people melded together in something awful:
a plane crash or car accident.
Only beautiful.
Only rhythmic.

Sometimes,

I can still taste your mouth
smoke and ash back then, cigarettes on the wind
only human now, that you've broken the habit
but still you tasted wonderful
and always I hungered more for you,
only your flavor could sate me.

Sometimes,

I think of the way our love was
so physical, requiring strength and desire
tempered like a sword
by the heat, by the hammering.

And I smile and reach for you.

[This message has been edited by Pweisbrod (10-31-2012 12:03 AM).]

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2012-10-31 07:20 AM

I like this, you used some different thought patterns to describe how the physical relationship affected you. Interesting and well done.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Pweisbrod
Junior Member

since 2011-10-14

Posts 27

2 posted 2012-10-31 08:37 AM

Thank you, Jerry!

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

3 posted 2012-10-31 08:48 AM

The past drifts up in my mind,
a candle-powered hot air balloon

Enjoyed your thoughts.

~Victoria~

"If music be the food of love, play on." (William Shakespeare)

Krawdad
Member Elite

since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

4 posted 2012-11-01 02:42 AM

I would agree - these are good lines:

"The past drifts up in my mind,
a candle-powered hot air balloon"

Pweisbrod
Junior Member

since 2011-10-14

Posts 27

5 posted 2012-11-01 10:29 PM

Thank you both.

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