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Open Poetry #48

To Get Away from Me

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

0 posted 2012-10-20 08:39 PM

To Get Away from Me

I mean its not her fault
if she doesn't want to
live in Hawaii (possibly mine)
take me for example
I don't want to live in Chicago
I don't even want to visit Chicago
and she did come to Hawaii
many times, until I told her
not to visit anymore,
after she came enough times
to figure out that she
preferred Chicago over me.
Life is about choices and locations
and in this case I wish
she had chosen Hawaii and me.

JamesLee
20October
2012

"Drive By" by Train
"Cause you moved to west L.A.
or New York or Santa Fe
or where ever to get
away from me."

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

1 posted 2012-10-20 08:59 PM

I've had a rather long string of 'lovely ladies' who chose places,
things, or other materialistic circumstances over me ... so, I can
certainly (all too well) 'relate' to his 'slice-of-real-life' write.

I guess I'm just a grand fool and 'incurable Romantic' ...
but, I still believe that only people and love should 'matter.'

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2012-10-20 09:26 PM

Sounds like she did all the traveling to you. Kind of a one-way street. I don't think she chose Chicago over Hawaii, I I think she chose self identity over selfishness. Only reason I said selfishness is because you said you are the one who broke it off, not her. That being so, why do you write these poems complaining about the the fact that you ran her off.

Perhaps you should pick another subject for your poetry.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

[This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (10-21-2012 09:02 AM).]

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2012-10-23 09:51 PM

Thank you secondhanddreampoet and Jerry for reading and responding...James

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