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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050
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 Our cliffs always were just a little too far apart to jump across, weren’t they Separated by an abyss of reality, in a virtual vista A creation of almost but not quite, and, just about, but not really, exactly Technology has a way of doing that sometimes In the back of the day when life wore the snowcaps of a simpler idiot, we used to be separated by mere dreams, and wishes We still are, but now we can actually type to them back and forth and even be, touched If something written was always meant to be part of the wallpaper, of our heart And who knew that one day we’d even have the power to break things instantly, thousands of miles away, with mere words Things like hearts and promises, or even, trust and will It’s not easy seeing your, image in an imaginary world Or breathing, in a totality without total Because the air is heavy with smoke and, mere we’re Sometimes paradise, are just two cubes of hope, that crapped out, at chance Sometimes to be, is choosing, not to And so the knot, is loosened, and the orbs go back in orbit, waiting for the chains or blessings of gravity, to bring them back around once again O the written feelings feigned as fingers, reaching out across, the gap Grasping for straws of empty baskets, barren of tender and wine, of entirety I guess there always is a cost to thread, our place in time Life is so much longer if you’re not afraid, to climb Cast the lines of faith across and tie them, long and fast The view together, always seems to make our, moment last |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Very well done, my friend. Really liked the way you put it together . . . especially "And who knew that one day we’d even have the power to break things instantly, thousands of miles away, with mere words Things like hearts and promises, or even, trust and will" j. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
thank you dear buddy.. that means alot to read your kind remarks hope your day is going well  |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
There are so many "good" lines and groups of lines I'll not attempt to single one or more out. You were damn well hittin' on all cylinders when you put together this masterpiece together, and I don't use that "masterpiece" word lightly, believe me. In fact I don't recall the last time I did use it. That photo is . . . something. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
hey thanks alot Jerry.. you really are being too kind, but i am certainly flattered by your kind remarks nonethless.. funny how we strain our brains for days on some pieces and others like this one just kind of fell out of my ear hole and there it was.. hope your having brillant day my friend |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Great poem but I have to say that my favorite part has to be the name "Fee line" and the picture. LOL! Kat >^..^< |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Richy, I get this, so totally, colours and shades of heavy with meaning and light with airiness, the history of now, and the now of history, superbly conceived. The picture was born for the poem as much as the poem burst out of the picture. LOVE the title, lol! Owl |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
haha well of course that was your favorite part.... Kat-ahdin lol! thanks as always for always having such kind things to say.. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Aww thank you Diana.. yeah sometimes we can draw our inspiration from a picture instead of trying to find one to fit after the fact.. i really appreciate all of your wonderful support.. thanks for coming by and lending your supportive words.. have a nice rest of the day! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Nice poem ~ [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (10-09-2012 11:13 AM).] |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
thank you for the kind review i sincerely appreciate it |
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