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Four Pieces |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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Felt like bringing this very oldie back. Helps remind me how far I have come. Carnival is here. Crowds jam the street with laughter. He plays solitaire Sits by the window In a smoky, crowded bar. Life passes him by High above the street A lonely window shines bright. Love is sold tonight. Crumpled note on floor Tells the story of love gone. Time now for dying. ©February 18, 1980 / Jerry Pat Bolton ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
sounds like an old bar I knew ... good piece my friend. Actually sounds like Artie's Bar just up from the Municipal Auditorium ... many years ago. j. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I wish I had entered the name of the bar when I wrote this, but I didn't and thirty-some odd years later, J, I don't remember it. It was on Magazine Street in the eighties, so you can figure out the skuzzy part. It catered to merchant marine people and its name had to do with the sea, Anchor Inn, or something like that. Thank you for stopping by, it is very much appreciated. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Ooo, this is such a lonely poem, but you tell it well. You've come a long way Jp~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Blues, no I am not the same man I was then, I would, in reality be dead if I were. Thank you very much for reading "Four Pieces," and commenting in them. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Wow, JP, thanks for sharing your life with us. Ms. E |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you, Ms. E, and you are welcome. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
You have indeed shared your life with us in a gutsy, gritty, intimate way. It has been a unigue and genuine pleasure getting to know you as we walk along your words with you. Lori  |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
It has been my pleasure, Lori. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Weighty loneliness you voiced very well. Enjoyed, Mr. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Yeah, it was that alright, JL. Thank you. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thanks...Jerry ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
The second read grabbed deeper than the first. I could almost hear the carnival and the all too quiet solitude despite the environment. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thanks, VAS, for the read and the second read. You words concerning the poem is greatly appreciated . . . ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
good read, great word pic |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I appreciate your kind thoughts, luminosity. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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