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Black Widow |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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From arms of her lover, she laughs at you Thinking pathetic the things that you do To gain her attention, but she’ll not sway You’re only a dog who has had his day The pain in your eyes she will note with glee She leaves you stripped bare so that all can see You give her a power she doesn’t deserve From her maddening path, she’ll never swerve So howl at the moon and sob through the night She’ll just mock you as a pitiful sight Her laugh will echo as she walks away With another who’ll learn that he’s just prey Soon his lover’s cross will stand beside yours And you'll understand the pain he endures But that won’t prevent your slow seeping yearn To be hers again – You never will learn As you look around, you accept your fate The bleached bones of those who’ve ended their wait Are gruesome testimony to her game But with last breath, you crave her all the same |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Ain't at da truff, suthern? Happens often, and we never seem to learn. It happens with genders reversed also, but I think more often it is as you have so written here. This was/is one hell-of-a rendering. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Winsomely wicked write here southern one and a write i really enjoyed... Thank you goldenrose. music was my refuge.i could crawl into the spaces between the notes and curl my back to loneliness - Maya Angelou |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Enjoyed! Kat >^..^< |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Jerry: Thank you very much, kind sir!  It does indeed happen with both genders... the players keep on playing, leaving heartbreak in their wake.Goldenrose: I don't think I've ever written winsomely wicked before... but I do love the description!!! LOL Thank you! katahdin: I'm glad you did! Thank you!! |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
*clap ... clap ... clap* Bravo! This picture is also hanging on my walls. Excellent write! always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Wow! I hope you gleaned this from a movie and not real life experience??  Gave me the old goose-bumps... Kinda like fingernails screeching across a blackboard. You did a stellar job... JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Pretty intense stuff, Suthern! Enjoyed, Ms. E |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
You captured this beautifully in all it's painful colors. Never understood the need for notches on the bedpost. It obviously speaks to a heart incapable of returning love that it continues to desparately seek. Too sad broken hearts need to break others Lori |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You go suthern gal!!! Love how you sunk your teeth into this one! Yay!!!! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Janette: It's great to see you here! Thank you!!! JL: Shivers ran down my spine at just the thought of fingernail screech. LOL Thank you very much, dear friend... a "stellar" from you is high praise indeed! *S* ebonygirl: I'm glad you enjoyed, dear lady... thank you! *S* Lori: I don't think I'll ever understand the collectors... and just hope any future contact I have with that ilk is as observer only. Thank you very much!Blues: If only my teeth could have snipped the bindings early on... or eyes seen past the pretty packaging! LOL Thank you so much, dear lady! |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Ha! I love this. Made me wonder if she wore a Merry Widow and the image took me off to another place. I wanted to be her just for a bit, but then the bones. Oh those pesky bones! I love this poem - xoxoxo A |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
We're all prey of a sort, my friend ... some just have greater need and trust than others, but eventually even the "player" missteps and becomes is preyed up and generally suffers much more than those one which he/she preyed. enjoyed. j. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Ruth, life has a way of getting back at such monsters as he. Sadly, there are so many fake and/or sick-minded predators - 2 legged ones without feathers, I mean - around, and because they have no conscience, they are not limited in their selfish, greedy, megalomaniac behaviour. I am sure your excellent poem was superbly cathartic. I have written a "black widow" poem or two in my time, and writing them does wonders for re-instating one's equilibrium. After that, the greatest and most effective reaction, I find, is to banish them from one's thoughts. I am glad, having seen from your reply in another recent poem of yours, that you are currently content. That is a hugely heart-warming thing to be. Owl |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
hey isnt that the spider who eats her mate after he's well.. you know.. ! ... haha makes one think about the webs we try and avoid.. but sometimes we do get trapped, just like Vincent Price.. helpppp meeee... helppppppppp meeeeeee haaha enjoyed this Ruth.. lots of wisdom weaved throughout |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Alison: I like the path your mind took... that may be the reason her web is so enticing! LOL Thank you!! jwesley: I've always liked the thought that what goes around comes around... but I never get the satisfaction of seeing the comeuppance? LOL I'm glad you enjoyed... thank you! Owl: My contentment has slipped several notches because of another variety of sick minded predators/2 legged monsters (I'll tell you about the latest round of farm thefts when/if I get to a breathing place). I'm just hoping for them to make that misstep Jimmy talked about. Thank you for your kind words! Richy: Yup... that's the one. LOL Thank you so much... I needed the smiles you left for me!! *S* To all: I hate explaining myself or writing disclaimers... but I hate misunderstandings more. It was brought to my attention that this poem caused pain to someone I care about. That was never my intention. I didn't have ANYONE from PIP in mind when I wrote it. It's simply a product of the way my mind bounces... I'd intended to tape a TV interview with an author I like. The recording cut off before Lee Child was interviewed so instead of seeing him discussing murder mysteries, I saw Don McLean discussing American Pie. That put Don McLean on my mental jukebox all the following day... until it skipped over to Jim Croce as I was walking to the bus. When I started humming Croce's "Lover's Cross", this poem poured out... I literally wrote it as I walked and waited for the bus. Writing about a collector wasn't difficult... I've met more than a few, fell for a couple and written about those experiences. A friend is scarring from a player right now. I drew on my memories... but changed the sex, hoping to make it more interesting and less personal. I do not write to hurt or harm - I'd rather never post another poem than to hurt someone I admire and respect. If taking this poem down would help, I'd ask to have it removed in a heartbeat. But the damage is done - and I was oblivious to it all. Please please PLEASE don't make assumptions. I try not to use this forum as a diary - I do not use it as a weapon. My apologies to all for the rambling... and to one in particular for the hurt I caused, however inadvertently. I rue the day I hummed that song. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
I think this was a great poem, capturing so many of the habitual flaws of human nature where want and/or need completely overcome reason... and how readily we see what we want instead of what lies right before our eyes over and over again, as if we were preprogrammed for such futility. Known a black widow or two in my time as you well know. Michael |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
LOL Suthern I was thinking you were rushing Halloween a little.Black widow spiders and all. Watched some real dectetive story on TV a few weeks ago and this womoen married and killed three or four men in a very short time even her little daughter by giving them asenic, all for the insurance money.She got hers!!!! jo |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Ruth, I am devastated to hear about yet more farm thefts. Please find a moment soon to email me. Owl |
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Kethry D Member
since 2010-04-12
Posts 64Australia |
Whenever I am feeling numb, I can always come back here and read your work. You never disappoint. Even when you are terrifying is an aweful terror. You make me feel again. Thank you dear lady. Write on! A poet must leave traces of his passing not proof. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You captured her well in this one. I have know a black widow or two in my time - and said, "Here you take him!" LOL Good one Ruth. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Impressive and powerful, dear Ruth, and ... so incredibly truthful to what happens more often than we might suspect. Your poetic excellence is in full view here. I would like to add that if somebody hurts when reading a poem and identifies with its message that is not the poet's fault or responsibility. And then, some lessons may hurt, but lessons they are and should be appreciated .Hugs. Margherita |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
My friend, having re-read this piece and seeing your "disclaimer" I decided to get on my soap box: If one suffers from an allusion, (true or not) then it is that one that has a problem, not you, and you should never feel you have to apologize and write a disclaimer for anything you write. If I apologized for every allusion in my writing I'd never have time to write, because, although some of my writing is from personal experiences, and may point fingers, most is not - it's from things I've heard, seen , read, and all the emotions that went with that, or which it produced in me. A person that thinks everything another says, thinks, writes, or whatever, is about themselves ... has problems, not you. I don't care what may or may not be going on now or in the past/future, between the two. And even if you do/where "alluding" - that's your emotional clearance and needs no explanation to anyone!! Especially not one that wants/needs to try and wear the shoes, to justify their own conflicts. jimmy |
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Lady Goodman Member
since 2012-10-04
Posts 193 |
awww...tsk and hugs. I thought this was about ME--but I am more akin to the brown recluse variety these days.  I hadn't been around much until lately, so I'm content to be clueless.  You touched a nerve, and I can say from personal experience, that can be a good thing that becomes a bad thing.  I've discovered that some will always question motivation, even with disclaimers. I do hope you and your friend patched things up. Once a poem is posted, it doesn't belong to us anymore, and a ball hit out of the park just might land in the lap of someone after it goes over the fence and ends up crashing through a window--and if you start worrying about that, it affects how you swing at the blank-page pitch of the ball. (I ramble...)It's good to read you again, Ruth. Just keep hitting the ball and run like hell. |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
lol, and yes I know, lol is not the typical reaction to this poem, but lol cause once I wrote one with the same title, but it was about me...and it sure isn't pretty looking at it from your eyes....great write lady |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Reminds me of Willie Nelsen's song 'Permanently Lonely'--but he feels sorry for the black widow, and I don't, because she doesn't think she's a pathetic figure, and most of them never do figure it out. And the ones who only get the thrill if they can take him away from someone who loves him really get my dander up. Which says nothing about your poem, which I enjoyed. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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