Open Poetry #48 |
mulholland dr |
Tomer Senior Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168Michigan |
They held their hands under the straw bridge that brought Madison bridge to a clear picture that day She was slim with her jeans just even under the kilt of the sky Her hair brushed towards the sulky state of the streets that drove towards Mulholland dr. The still ease that drove the southern sky brought her lips to a quiet subtle often rebuttal towards the wind that tensed against the buildings high rise The still hands that he brought towards her left sided skin She under Mulholland drive Under the tempers of the wind Mulholland at the curve Slim jeans and skin like a mothers pearl. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Oh yes!!!! Such a sultry and seductive poem, especially loved that last verse of yours. Very nice, Tomer~ |
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Tomer Senior Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168Michigan |
Thanks, Blues...happy it resonated - Hope you're well. Cheers Tomer |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I love this gem, Tomer, and the way you scuplted and carefully directed it into flashes of cinematography and the unexpected internal rhyme in the fourth stanza and the overall seamless excellence. Owl |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I enjoyed this a lot...nice romantic writing....James |
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Tomer Senior Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168Michigan |
Owl- I'm happy you enjoyed it...kind words, as always. Thanks. Cheers |
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Tomer Senior Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168Michigan |
James- Happy you did. Hope you're well... Cheers |
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