Open Poetry #48 |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
If, when you look, you just see flaws Then save your glance this way because My faults are many, virtues few Lack of perfection I must rue All I can offer’s love for you – Look at me and see the love If you expect sweet sounding song You’ll find the notes I utter wrong But beyond lack of melody Is a heart that’s in harmony With all you are and want to be - Listen and you’ll hear the love If you want youth, that’s passed me by I see a mirror, want to cry The years have taken heavy toll Wrinkles on skin and scars on soul Certainly never were a goal - But feel my touch and know the love There is no doubt that you could find More beautiful, better designed But no one loves you more than me If you’ll give us a chance you’ll see Perhaps the best is yet to be - Let’s fill each day and night with love |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I love this. Upfront and sincere is the tone of this beauty, my friend. And, as I read the lines I could truly feel the love. It is a lucky man that takes advantage of that love. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
one of your best, my friend. I loved it!!! j. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
There is great wisdom embedded in your beautiful, sensitive poem, dear Ruth. Love IS the only perfection ever needed indeed. Your heart opens here through your words in all its true and profound beauty. A gem, my dear! Love, Margherita "Love is the One who masters all things; |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
You are a true romantic, Ruth and a fine poet. Ida |
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Startime1955 Senior Member
since 2012-04-22
Posts 1072Alberta, Canada |
True love flows perfectly through these honest words...I love this poem...*BIG HUGS* *may our dreams ever be magical* |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Virtues few? Dang, had I only known! lol Nicely written, fine lady. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Beautifully sensitive and sensitively beautiful, Ruth! Owl |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
The honesty, the sincerety, the simplicity, the grace - are all reasons to read these verses again and again Loved this Liz |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Aww girlfriend, you are so very special.... dontcha know!! Just like a suthern wind, you leave me breathing your poetry in. It's all good and so very heady in it's sweet honesty. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
“All I can offer’s love for you – Look at me and see the love” “But beyond lack of melody Is a heart that’s in harmony” “But feel my touch and know the love” “Perhaps the best is yet to be - Let’s fill each day and night with love” (qualified: Meeting the proper standards and requirements) I think this write shows an attitude more than ‘qualified’. It is a true display of a heartfelt honesty, way beyond what that first verse eludes to. “If, when you look, you just see flaws Then save your glance this way because My faults are many, virtues few Lack of perfection I must rue” Enjoyed the read, suthern. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
An exquisite lyrical plea this is... lovely in every facet. Michael |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Jerry: Thank you very much! *S* What a wonderful thing to say! jwesley: Thank you very much - I'm glad! *S* Margherita: Thank you so very much, dear friend... Your view of me is so kind! *S* Marchmadness: You left me smiling... thank you so much!! *S* Startime: And I love your response! LOL Thank you so much! LngJhnAg: Sweet sailor, seeing your name makes me want to post more more MORE... in hopes you'll come back!!! LOL Would that work... or send you scurrying? LOL I miss you, scalawag! *S* Thank you!!! Owl: You could be describing you, sweet lady... thank you! *S* Lady Santos: To have you read once is an honor... and you have left me beaming. *S* Thank you so much! Blues: What a delight you are, sweet lady... thank you so very much! JL: I wrote this after reading a bunch of job listings and feeling inadquate for anything that looked remotely interesting. LOL But I guess I'm braver when it comes to love... for I know all my faults and shortcomings and will be honest about all I lack... and still say... "just give me a chance, I can do this." *S* Thank you so much!! Michael: Thank you so very much! *S* I'm glad you liked! *S* |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Wonderful...James |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
James: Thank you very much! *S* |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Don't forget that love is a two way street, Ruth and others aren't perfect either...though some think they are. Ida |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
What an absolutely lovely comment to me, Ruth! You helped to make my day! The man who wins you will indeed be a lucky man! Smiles. Owl |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Beautifully written and warmly given... ms. e |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I'm sending this to the top again...James |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Ida: You're right about that street! *S* Thank you very much!! Owl: I think you may be a tad prejudiced there, dear friend... but you sure gave me a smile... thank you! *S* Ms E: I thank you from the bottom of my heart. *S* James: How kind of you... Thank you so much! |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I love this, Ruth. So positive and hopeful. I think you are the best and (perhaps) over-qualified! A |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Alison: You live in the land of the midnight sun... but you brighten these blue walls and my life all year through. Thank you for the perfectly timed and worded boost!! It... and you... are so greatly appreciated!! |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
ah...sigh...ah....sigh...hope is alive...and...sigh.....shall read again |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
read again, but...sigh...I have to say I don't believe, love is a pretenders game, some are better at it than others....me...I stopped the game... wait... what's that I feel??? a tinge of hope?...perhaps...I shall read again [This message has been edited by luminosity (12-27-2013 05:44 PM).] |
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