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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2012-08-06 12:28 PM

a zephyr moves the night
giving the trees their soft sway
rustling leaves
'neath the moon's glow
bright tonight
like a highlight from heavens' portal
causing the dark to recede
spotlighting the grass
bending in cadence with the leaves
as they quiver from the gentle wind
serene is the night
then . . .
harsh light streams through an opened window
naked is the beam it projects
fat, harsh
are the colors as it stabs the night
noise from inside the opened window
strident laughing
disrupting the peace and quiet of before
as though by rote
the leaves began their dance
as if trying to
come to terms with the harshness
of the window's bright
and now
the constellation
Orion, the Hunter watches with
frowning intensity

©August 1, 2012 / Jerry Pat Bolton

~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

Startime1955
Senior Member

since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

1 posted 2012-08-06 11:28 PM

Love it...the vision was magical...well done, my friend...*BIG HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

Prasad Nataraj
Senior Member

since 2008-05-29

Posts 1149
Bangalore,India

2 posted 2012-08-07 05:49 AM

magical write, Jerry. Descriptive writing!

"The secret behind survival of mankind is kindness and love within our hearts"
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JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2012-08-07 06:34 AM

Love your reasoning (magical) behind the poem, Karen, thank you very much.

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JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2012-08-07 06:36 AM

Thank you, Prasad , for seeing the magic in the poem.

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JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

5 posted 2012-08-07 06:22 PM

"the leaves began their dance
as if trying to
come to terms with the harshness
of the window's bright
and now
the constellation
Orion, the Hunter watches with
frowning intensity"

Loved the write, my friend.
That close is picture perfect.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

6 posted 2012-08-07 06:28 PM

Hi, JL. Good to see you back. Thank you for your nice thoughts about the frowning Orion. Haha

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