Soil Please Not Thirst (repost)

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Open Poetry #48

Soil Please Not Thirst (repost)

Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

0 posted 2012-07-17 10:28 AM

Your my Knight in shining armor
With your sword held in your hand
Heading out to battle
To protect and save our land

Before you go, Let me show
How much you mean to me
For I fear each time you leave
Twill be the last I see of thee

Time is short, this I know
The enemies steeds I can hear
Let me kiss each eye
look upon you one more time
Whisper Godspeed into thine ear

Lord, while your away I'll be on my knees
And do nothing but pray
That the soil not thirst
For Your blood on this day

Hours have passed
And the clashing of the swords
Has ceased at last, but from my spot
I'll not move
For I already hear the wooden wheels
on cobble stones, and the tears
full of all my fears to prove

Then come the foot steps approaching
Behind me, I simply cannot breath
For is it you or a messanger
To tell me of your leave

You place your hand gently upon
My shoulder, mine touches yours as
Quickly as it can
I take a breath, A sob escapes
As I place my cheek upon
Your blood soaked hand

Thank You
~~~Connie~~~

[This message has been edited by Zinsser (edited 09-07-2001).]
© Copyright 2001 Connie McDonald - All Rights Reserved

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2012-07-17 11:36 AM

Loved the continuity in this poem. Sometimes with longer poetry we tend to wander about. I liked the message you delivered also. Good work.

~*~ they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

Startime1955
Senior Member

since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

2 posted 2012-07-17 12:23 PM

This story took me and opened its vision perfectly...I love it...*BIG HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

3 posted 2012-07-17 02:15 PM

What a beautiful story you've written! I really enjoyed! And knowing what it's like to pray a love be spared, I LOVE your title!!!

ebonygirl
Member Elite

since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

4 posted 2012-07-18 11:58 AM

I like this story!
Ms. E

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