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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2012-06-30 06:09 AM

There’s a story in my African sky
clearly seen and understood
when the clouds have passed on by
and winter says it’s arrived.

I could read it word for word out loud
and change my tone according to
the feeling of the times
if you asked me to.

No one asks; of course, they don’t
because history isn’t captivating
in a world that moves now double-pace
towards annihilation.

But my story never disappears
caught as it is in heaven’s blue
and when I look up, up, up,
I can see love smiling down.

That’s all it does; just smile, smile, smile,
to make me think my story is
completely acceptable
so why then be so woe betide?

I wrote you in, you see, in my forever story
but then the clouds rolled on it
and left a void where should have been
a truly meaningful conclusion.

When what we write has been erased
and love still smiles down, down, down,
what can we do but smile right back
because … one smile deserves another!

Helen / 30 June 2012

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2012-06-30 06:41 AM

The smiles are omens that love still lives and is still needed in this world and in your heart, Helen. Beautiful wordplay this morning.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

2 posted 2012-06-30 07:10 AM

Yep, that last verse is the hope that's eternal and we all have access to it.
Good things happen when you least expect them.
If that one didn't last forever then the next one will, just the way it goes sometimes.
I really enjoyed the melancholy beauty in this but then I write a lot of blues songs so I belive in the healing of that.

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

Startime1955
Senior Member

since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

3 posted 2012-06-30 10:56 AM

*sigh* one smile begets another...I just watched a couple who are 74 and 65 get married...he treats her with such sweet tendernees which she returns...it taught me that love can come at any age and time...I so hope you get what your heart desires...I can feel the tenderness in your words...*BIG HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

4 posted 2012-07-01 02:15 PM

Thank you all for your comments. I take them all to ... heart.

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

5 posted 2012-07-03 01:01 AM

Smiling at this, Helen
Ida

latearrival
Member Ascendant

since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

6 posted 2012-07-03 02:17 AM

I love this and am so happy to hear you are seeing the smiles.Made me smile too. jo

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

7 posted 2012-07-03 02:20 AM

Thanks Ida and Jo. Yes, I do see the humour in life - sometimes takes a little while to appreciate it though.

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

8 posted 2012-07-03 02:18 PM

quote:
No one asks; of course, they don’t
because history isn’t captivating
in a world that moves now double-pace
towards annihilation.

Indeed! This one aches with the longing for the unobtainable. Something I too readily relate to. Well done.

Michael

ebonygirl
Member Elite

since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

9 posted 2012-07-05 04:01 AM

Love your style! The wording is beautiful.
Enjoyed your poem.
Ms. E

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

10 posted 2012-07-07 08:39 PM

Nice...James

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