Open Poetry #48 |
Fall of the Sun |
JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
look at it this way your mind is at work caprice is in session holding consistency yours is a growing kindred romanticism as you search filigree embellished sky high awaiting the abstract spiraling moonbeams to swathe your body with the love of a far away one who only appears in secret trysts tempting fate for her for she is your adytum her face sacred, her body a shrine of bliss these wonderful trysts are sweet to the bone still, leaving us pseudo fulfilled, wanting more not now, maybe never these few minutes of love sharing is precious she takes all the chances in the fall of the sun ©Jerry Pat Bolton ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I learned a new word today... and I found a new poem to treasure. Libraried... with a soft light. "The business of the poet...is to show the sorriness underlying the grandest things and the grandeur underlying the sorriest things." Thomas Hardy |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you, Karilea, it is always fascinating to learn new words, you and your soft light . . . Gotta love it, and I do. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Startime1955 Senior Member
since 2012-04-22
Posts 1072Alberta, Canada |
WOW!!! Stunning...the picture starts the vision and then your words give it life...Your lady love will love this beauty...*BIG HUGS* *may our dreams ever be magical* |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I hope she will like it, Karen, and thank YOU for your wonderful thoughts about it. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Beautiful, Jerry, both picture and words! |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you, Helen, thank you very much. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Great writing Jerry and like Helen expressed, the picture makes it all come together. Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I appreciate the time you took to read my poem and comment, Eric. Thank you. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
I've commented one time about a poem that felt bittersweet, and here I read yours and feel the same feeling. Pseudo fulfilled... how apropos. This certainly tugs at the heart strings. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
The thing is, Nicole, we live in a instant gratifying world these days, and love had filtered into the instant gratifying world. Not too many love affairs, or even marriages make it these day. Don't know if that is all bad. Living with a person you can't stand the site of just for the kid, who will call you everything but a good parent in their teenage years has it merits too. Thank you for stopping by, I appreciate it. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
What a beautiful presentation! Poem and picture complement each other so well... This is just lovely! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: This is wonderful, how true that even a few minutes can give us a true "high" that nurtures us for hours, days ... Much enjoyed! Margherita |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you very much, suthern, for taking the time to read and comment on my poem, it is appreciated. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Margherita, it is those true "highs" that we live for and receive far too few of during our lives. Thank you for being here. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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