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viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

0 posted 2010-01-08 03:31 AM

Alison did it, thought I'd try.

To me now, from me then.
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Stop and breathe
the grass is still green-
Hold your breath in those big lungs
and taste the spring.

When did you forget?
Love is simple.

You can even drive now,
wow! This jeep is fun.
No roof or doors to hold us in.

You're a real live uncle
like uncle rick
or uncle chad.

You've got your very own dog!
He loves to play in the snow,
just like I do.

You're so strong now
from lifting all that stuff.
You should pick up your heart
and carry it home.
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Lame.
Paul

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

1 posted 2010-01-08 08:00 AM

Not Lame! Perfect!!

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2010-01-08 12:58 PM

Lame?! are you kidding me?!

it's awesome just like you

viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

3 posted 2010-01-08 02:54 PM

Thanks TD.

Sea, my dear Sea, you are always far too kind.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Klassy Lassy
Member Elite

since 2005-06-28

Posts 2187
Oregon

4 posted 2010-01-09 03:34 AM

Home is where you hang your hat
or so I have been told
but I, too, like to think
the heart makes love unfold

When I read how strong you are
and in that jeep you roam!
a smile slips across my lips 'cause
your heart always brings you home

I liked your poem very much...so full of life!

viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

5 posted 2010-01-10 02:41 AM

Thanks Klassy,

I liked yours very much as well.

You're far too kind, and I appreciate it. Glad you enjoyed.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
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6 posted 2010-01-10 01:56 PM

love is simple, yes

nice one here

viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

7 posted 2010-01-10 10:06 PM

Thanks so very much, PS.

And P.S. --- Thanks for reading and commenting on all my poems. You're a shiny penny, you are.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Earl Brinkman
Senior Member

since 2010-03-03

Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan

8 posted 2010-06-17 03:24 AM

I would not call this work lame. It is from the heart and it is you. You gave a little of yourself to us and we are grateful.

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

9 posted 2010-06-17 03:30 AM

You make me smile, Paul.

xoxoxo
Ali

bel1e
Senior Member

since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

10 posted 2010-06-17 01:37 PM

Ohhh....very nicely done!

viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

11 posted 2010-06-17 07:24 PM

Resurrecting an old piece, ay? Thank you, all three of you. Thank you very much.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Boshii2
Member

since 2009-02-01

Posts 146

12 posted 2010-06-19 11:13 PM

nostalgia in each line

lost in my own now
thank you
kind regards Boshii2

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

13 posted 2010-06-20 12:45 PM

viking_metal - you write well...

BC

whisperingwalt
Member

since 2010-04-29

Posts 240
Coquitlam, BC, Canada

14 posted 2010-06-20 09:32 PM

This was a unique perspective and you shared a side of you with everyone....Once in awhile we just need to sit comfortable with the thought that we are incredible and that the hurt and insecure part of ourselves is no longer who we are...keep up the good work.ww

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