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unfinishedlife
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0 posted 2010-03-07 01:59 PM



My body: collapse.
Like trees in lightning..
To twist, to warp, to fall
Like rope, like winds, like trees.

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Margherita
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1 posted 2010-03-07 02:25 PM


Cedars are beautiful. We are vulnerable like trees ... yes.

Succinct, yet the message is conveyed well.

Love,
Margherita

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2 posted 2010-03-07 02:30 PM


I like this.

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passing shadows
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3 posted 2010-03-07 03:09 PM


yes! Nice!

I don't think I've welcomed you

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unfinishedlife
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4 posted 2010-03-07 03:16 PM


Thank you all
Although, I think this qualifies as what my cousin would refer to as a 'poem fart'

Earl Brinkman
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5 posted 2010-03-17 08:31 AM


I like the rhythm in this piece.  Nice.
Chalmette Guy
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6 posted 2010-03-17 08:55 AM


This is very good for a 'poem fart'. lol
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