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Long ago, Tiers
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Long ago, Tiers |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
He wiped away tiers fell long ago upon jagged edges and rucked scars hoping it would scatter but not really tender feelings so hard to swallow these days She would lay herself in between where it was soft as pillows "if you knew your way around" slide curious fingers along his sigh alert to melodical changes Sometimes he would pause allowing her warmth to fill a fraction of need before cloaking himself in the cold of ambiguity able to reap & gather yet remain untouchable Still she knew behind smoke & mirrors lay promise, nestling inside, she claimed always despite his never... ~Sunkissed  |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
"Tiers", indeed. This is a crafty write. There is a line from Dr. Strangelove that comes immediately to mind, but I shan't spoil the discovery there. Thanks again, Sunkissed, for an interesting and stimulating read. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
kewl in blue..enjoyed the wiggle weave of words |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Easy1, you have the wheels in my mind turning. How about a hint? *smiles* Thanks for taking a gander and for your comment. DS, thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed! ~Sunkissed |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
They're a couple of General Jack Ripper lines, deadpanned by Sterling Hayden at his comic best. There in the movie they are used as a sign of lost sanity. In your lovely poem, you paint the same distilled sentiment as much more tender, sort of a ronin or knight-errant spirit, partly of machismo, partly chivalry, partly hesitancy to commit emotionally, even deeply in love. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Not only is this write very elegant, it is also psichologically profound. Love, Margherita |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You write with such sensitivity and it's always a joy to read you. Glad to know you haven't lost your touch, like fine china, it's just as delicate as ever. Warm hugs~ |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
yes a very delicate and elegant write ma'am enjoyed your view.... |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Easy1, to quote you," In your lovely poem, you paint the same distilled sentiment as much more tender, sort of a ronin or knight-errant spirit, partly of machismo, partly chivalry, partly hesitancy to commit emotionally, even deeply in love." You've managed to encapsulate all I was trying to convey with these words. Thank you! Margherita, thank you! Elegant and profound, two words that in my opinion are truly a compliment to any poet. Blues, so sweet of you to say such kind things about my work. It's good to see you name here. Thank you! Captain, thank you for the read and the compliments. As you know, I write from the heart & this particular subject is dear to me. ~Sunkissed |
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