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Ships That Pass by Night
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Ships That Pass by Night |
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Gunslinger Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 901TX, USA 
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It was just a folding table, in a crowded laundromat. It really doesn’t matter when, nor where the place was at. I caught her looking straight at me, I had to look away... Her loneliness, and fear, and doubt, were plain as light of day.. I felt that I’d intruded, that her very soul was bare- I can’t forget the hunger, I saw bottled up in there. She smiled, I nodded, turned away, for she must never know, The impact that she had on me, I felt it like a blow. My clothes were dry I folded them, and still I felt her eyes- Grasping desperately to hold, I knew she realized... That I would start my truck and leave, I almost felt her fright- Two ships that pass out on the sea, then vanish in the night. Two ships tossed by a tempest, as they wallow through life’s sea, Loneliness a fact of life for those like her, and me. Inexorably they’re drawn apart, to slowly fade from sight... A product of the world they know, these ships that pass by night. |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I have seen this woman and I have folded my clothes under the garish lights of laundry mats at night. I have felt this lonliness. And you wrote it all so well. A |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
You expressed those feelings expertly. Loved it.latearrival |
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gilead Senior Member
since 2008-03-10
Posts 1067nevada, USA |
A very haunting, poignant piece, you've made it so real, so true to life; I can feel the loneliness. Regards ---Art |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
This poem was well written and much admired. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
What a GREAT poem! Fantastic composition and flow. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow this is a powerhouse poem....you've expressed loneliness extremely well, very poignant and beautifully sad to read. Especially now I relate to these words! |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
P.S: I wish I had written this!  I'm saving it in my library!  |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Gunslinger, take a bow my friend for that poem is a real classic. Very well written and telling such a sad poignant tale. one of your best I have ever read. A delight to read. Lindsay |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
A touching, well written poem, John. Ida |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
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