Open Poetry #46 |
I Felt a Lifetime |
Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
I felt a lifetime in your love last night You wrapped your heart around me and held me tight until I could breathe again And I believed you could and would be able to love me through my tomorrows like they were yesterday |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Sweet. Expertly to the point. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Wow! |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
this really warms the heart love happy thoughts |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
thanks XGarapanX! Lori |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Sunshine, Wow is right! Thanks Rex! Me Too! Lori |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
A lot was said in this well-written, well-conceived poem, Lori. I hate to being up one particular part of it, because thee whole poem was perfect in my opinion. But when you wrote the last five lines they jumped off the page . . . er . . . screen. To mimic is a form of praise unless |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
very nicely said. latearrival |
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incwrite Member
since 2010-12-31
Posts 55new york |
very sweet, very well written ,,,brought me into every word...wow |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
To feel this kind of love is a beautiful thing. Thanks for sharing it. Hugs, Ethel |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Awesome!! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hi Lori Have to agree with Jerry. You're very clever in your inneundo and the last part is filled with those implications of love's flat tire needing some repair. Really enjoy this concise work a lot! Eric ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Jerry, thanks for your comments! ________________________________________ latearrival- thanks, glad you liked it ________________________________________ incwrite- thanks for the "wow" ____________________________________________ Kaoru-Cool! glad you liked it! ________________________________________ Ethel -you are welcome-Thank you! __________________________________________ Eric-thanks for your comments too, I'm happy you enjoyed it. ____________________________________________ Thank you all for taking the time and effort to read this and comment! Lori |
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incwrite Member
since 2010-12-31
Posts 55new york |
beautifully penned |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
incwrite-thanks! Lori |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is just fantastic, dear Lori! Love and Happy New Year! Margherita |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Margherita- Thanks and much love and a Happy New Year to you too! Lori |
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