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Rex Allen McCoy
Member Elite

since 2000-01-30

Posts 2863
Sippin a Timmy's in London

0 posted 2010-12-31 02:04 PM

~
Groping puddles
knees down in barley
merely stains your Levis

The rainbow's ore lies deep in the coldest stream
where dreams in abundance
litter the shoreline
as aspiration surrenders to intimidation

The empty hand
seldom soaks past the elbow

Wade deeper
awaken your reverie
~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2010-12-31 02:22 PM

I like this alot.

where dreams in abundance
litter the shoreline
as aspiration surrenders to intimidation

this part was killer for me
Lori

XGarapanX
Senior Member

since 2008-06-19

Posts 1435
Antarctica

2 posted 2010-12-31 02:23 PM

VERY cool. Loved it.

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`·

JerryPat
Senior Member

since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

3 posted 2010-12-31 02:44 PM

It is when we past the wadding part and began to tread that life is ours to have.

Nice work.

To mimic is a form of praise unless
you have no thoughts of your own

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

4 posted 2011-01-01 11:51 AM

The guys that sold the shovels were always the only ones that made any money.

Write on! This is very good and moving.

Eric

ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call
and kinda driftin away from it all

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

5 posted 2011-01-01 11:20 PM

I like this and I like looking for rainbow.

A

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

6 posted 2011-01-02 03:20 PM

Very captivating poem! Reverie will restore transparency of the mud puddles. Dreams are never wasted I think, they just wait for the right moment to manifest.

Love,
Margherita

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

7 posted 2011-01-02 08:09 PM

I remember my first grounded rainbows...
it was because oil was in the waters...

good write, Rex.

More, please?

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

8 posted 2011-01-04 07:19 PM

Nice...James

eminor_angel
Member

since 2003-05-22

Posts 323
Canada

9 posted 2011-01-04 11:21 PM

dreams in abundance litter the shoreline . . . there's my highlight. good job.

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