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Behind The Guard
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Behind The Guard |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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I often wondered how within the feeling of your pulse you could cast off love and get achieved results but then I got to know you the things you'd been through I knew that love was just a word that pushed you from the truth But then you let things out those things a hurt will hide most can't help themself comes from the needs inside I stupidly wanted to bed you thinking that a common soothe but you're made of stars and scars and I was just a fool your guard was up while you were pleading to fill an empty hole and totally convinced yourself you could never stretch the role but DNA and RNA all the new found rules can't explain the connective rain that fills all vibes with jewells I caught your eyes They stole a look while I was watching falling snow I filled your eyes with my heart you let your guard down slow nothing then could make us part from that moment we did yield to the cause without a reason that cures hearts that don't feel. ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call and kinda driftin away from it all |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I caught your eyes They stole a look while I was watching falling snow I filled your eyes with my heart ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Well I'm going to have to come back to this, it's a bit painful in a beautiful way....and I'm getting way too emotional sitting here, sobbing! I do love this~ |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
beautifully written piece  last verse, my favorite |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I loved this and while we as human beings are so much alike, men and women are so very different, and you have touched it dead on target...very well done...nice to read you... |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
I relate. Third wife. Both of us wearing that shield in front of us. Been hurt. Did hurt. Still, needing physical comfort we took each other on. Damned it it didn't work. These lines, "I knew that love was just a word / that pushed you from the truth" resonate my friend. To mimic is a form of praise unless |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hi Blues Glad you did read and loved it. Hope you come back I really appreciate it. Eric _________________________________ Rex Thanks for the read and complimenting comment. Much appreciated. Eric |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
A very thoughtful and understanding write.Good one.latearrival |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you LeeJ Yes, we are different but we do compliment each other if we work at polishing it and realizing the difference. I for one sure am glad you beautiful women aren't like men in any way. That would be a drag! Eric ________________________ Hey Jerry We all go down a lot of roads and I know where you're coming from. But the possibilities of happiness rest solely on our own willingness to forgive and how hard we are willing to work at it all. I think a good marriage is made up of two very good forgivers, if that makes any sense?? Eric ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hello mother latearrival. Thanks for dropping in and for the positive comment. Eric ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
A very powerful write. "but you're made of stars and scars and I was just a fool" These lines were particularly captivating to my mind. Perhaps there was much there to echo a distant truth. Thanks for sharing. Peace. "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Andrew I understand your reply concerning those lines. There's skeletons everywhere. Thanks for the opening comment. Take care Eric ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Eric- Guess you have to stand in line to applaud this poem! I saw myself in this piece. I like what you said to Jerry about a good marriage being two good forgivers...wise words there. I'm enjoying your work very much. Lori |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
The general conception is that we will be whole when we find the perfect mate, but a wise person once told me that when the half that I am is whole, then I would find my other half. What a gift of thought that substance of heart is! And strangely enough, with all the looking, sometimes eyes are not open to it. More recently I was told a story about the sun, the wind, and the rain having a discussion. The wind said he had blown across a deep dark shadow and try as he might, he couldn't dispel the darkness. So the rain said he would give it a shot, but he also soon returned glum, tearful, and defeated. They told the sun there was no way to solve the dilemma, so the sun went to check it out. He soon returned smiling. He said, I couldn't find a shadow! I think to fill someone's eyes with your heart may blind them at first with the radiance, but can't think of a better way to dispel the shadows!!! That substance is priceless. ~K |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ET...perfect views of heart bugs hitting the windsheld..enjoyed it !! |
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Misty Lilacs Senior Member
since 2005-11-15
Posts 1060White Birch Forest |
Awwww ... an awesome write that tugs at many heartstrings! Great write Eric. ooxx Marti I do the <color=orange><b>MS Walk</color></b> everyday!! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I enjoyed your perspicacious and instrospective view point, especially your last stanza and the twist at the end of it. Whilst, like Klassy Lassy, I agree with your view point about 2 forgivers - I have also realised that both people really need to be on the same wavelength and also to be right for each other. Personally, I much prefer to be alone than experience the loneliness of being with the wrong man - a mistake I made all too often. Owl |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Thoughtful and sensitive. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Lori I'm pleased that you consider that sound advice and also you enjoyed this write. I appreciate the comments very much Eric ------------------------------- Thank you Klassy Very nicely thought out. Thanks for sharing that. Love the story of the sun, wind and rain. Thanks for the substance comment. Have a great day! Eric ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey DS you always get a smile out of me and I appreciate that, heart bugs hitting the windshield. Many thanks Eric ____________________________________ Marti That's a very kind comment and thanks for letting me tug! Eric ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hi Owl It's a gamble we might try too many times but then we all fall for it over and over. Beside being lodged in the heart it's a built-in biological function. However, many have avoided the strength of the draw and have chosen to be alone to find much happiness there. Works for some as we're all built different. Thanks for your insightful comment. Eric -------------------------------- Garapan Thanks for that kind comment and the visit. Eric ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Lovely, sensitive poem, Eric, Many beautiful lines. Ida |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks so much Ida Good to receive your visit and comments. Eric ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call |
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mikeandrew Member
since 2010-11-18
Posts 198 |
that was very emotional poem i like the rhythm you used . |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Mike I appreciate the visit and the kind words. Come back anytime. Eric ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call |
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