Open Poetry #46 |
Trapped |
irmirt Junior Member
since 2010-06-09
Posts 18 |
Trapped Most everyone encountered, Meets imaginary me. The clothes that do not make the man, Announce the part they see. With trusting, reversed eyes I look, On mirror’s lying tales; The one I’ve recognized, forsook, Youthful strength now fails. Longing, seeking future days, With grown up avenue, Attracts the young like lights of night, As moths each one, pays due. The hair that once adorned my head, Departed, thinned, and gray. Struck confidence a cautious blow; Confused from chance instead. The words I speak; expressing mind; Explain I’ll try to do. Display the cultured self, Time’s enemy I’ll find Although the youthful days are fade, Within I’m still in bloom, Each day brings riches I won’t trade I’ll tolerate the gloom. I trust my friends and fellows, Too riches deep will seek. For those who look upon the shell, Paint values gray and bleak. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Just excellent! Loved these lines especially: Longing, seeking future days, With grown up avenue, Attracts the young like lights of night, As moths each one, pays due. So true, so very true. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Good stuff here! I liked your last stanza best. Merry Christmas Lori |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Now see here, my friend Irmirt...I did all that coloring to "stay" young...and I find after all is said and done that youth has nothing at all on us old codgers...without spending time to paint ourselves, we quite outrun the Dodgers! Enjoyed this...know the feel, but keep stealing base, anyway. Merry Christmas! |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Really enjoyed and understood. Welcome . latearrival |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Nice work, and written in an understandable way. To mimic is a form of praise unless |
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irmirt Junior Member
since 2010-06-09
Posts 18 |
Mysteria, Lori, Late, Jerry, Thanks for your encouragement. I only hope as you read you can relate with some of the feelings and thoughts along your path. Dear Sunshine... stolen bases, painted faces... your words are like planted seeds. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Missed this one irmit, Glad I came back and found it. I will be watching for you from now on. Ida |
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