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The Secret (inspired by JerryPat)
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The Secret (inspired by JerryPat) |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now 
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*This was inspired by JerryPat`s poem about keeping (or releasing) a terrible secret. I found myself fascinated by the topic. I know what it is to be on both ends of one. Jerry, thanks for the poem spark!  Apologies if this is `dark`... it is what it is, written (unfortunately) from the human experience.. . Ah, it was a wrecking ball in my lap- the pressure, crushing bone and sinew both- I strained to breathe, not even air enough to cry out. How he managed to lift and drop it I can`t imagine, but he was lighter for the transfer. Now, I stagger through days, this dark and pitted heft across my shoulders, bending me in two, and so bewildered- they never seem to notice. I often want to gasp: Why don`t you ask me? Don`t you wonder what this is I`m carrying? Someday, this weight will break me. Then, I`ll crumple- glad to let the dust, the earth bear me, my gifted burden, and this pointless suffering upon its ancient bosom. [This message has been edited by Amaryllis (12-30-2010 02:23 AM).] |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Well done... I too read Jerry's piece and was inspired to repost a piece from the past. Once again, an enjoyable read. Peace. "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thanks, Andrew...yes, we seem to have 3 `secret` titled poems up now! Lol All good. It`s fun to grab poetic ideas from one another. Best~ Amaryllis |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Thank you, Amaryllis, for saying you were inspired by my poem. I wouldn't apologize for writing "dark." Some of the greatest poets of the world were obsessed with the dark inside of them. Everything is not rainbows with a pot of gold. I liked this poem very much. You explained what a terrible thing certain secrets can be to the individual. Well done. To mimic is a form of praise unless |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Waiting, weighting. Wings clipped or broken in anguish when the wish to fly sunward is so strong, but carried on truth and regret and the need for healing.... How profound your words are! |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
This is fantastic! I'm glad you fed your "poem spark" to flame. Lori [This message has been edited by Lori Grosser Rhoden (12-30-2010 11:59 AM).] |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thank you, Jerry, for your reply and for understanding Thank you too, Klassy, for your own profound words! Best~ Amaryllis . . A pile of scribbles here: http://sharonleighpoetry.blogspot.com |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms a'mary..I guess even if falling we can call it temporary flight?...enjoyed your view ms |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I felt your anguish, Amaryllis, throughout this mind- and heart-shaking poem, and it still weighs heavily on me. I am sure that the writing of it and the reading and re-reading of it, though probably accompanied by painful tears, will have and will again bring a cathartic purging of the heavy pain. Instead of allowing the experience to strangle you, you have allowed your strength to create of it, a thing of beauty and healing. Well done! Owl |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thank you so much, Owl! Yes, I know this reads heavy and despairing, yet I was attempting to convey a certain corner of experience, exclusively. Of course life is not all crushing weight...truly I am not to be broken by these things. There is an undeniable hope, and I should write a poem about the way we feel feel the next morning when we rise again (a la Angelou). Thanks again for your concern & your reply!All my best~ Amaryllis |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
I do not dou7bt that it is not all crushing nweight. |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
The spirit is meant to rise, and we are amazingly strong and persistant in the face of woe. You know, I was very touched by your insight of something we do not often speak of.  ~K |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thank you, Klassy That means a lot!A |
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