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abandoning of butterflies
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abandoning of butterflies |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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you were like evening in a white kite sky throwing gravel shadows across my eyes just letting me see enough of your music to know you had been there again but you still didn't stay long enough for me to actually remember seeing more than the sounds of looking back and looking through those parted blinds always with my eyes closed too it seems and those tattoos in the dust on the glass were they from your fingers on the outside or from mine on the prison side surface left as temporary keys to heart locked letters _______________ daark [This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (12-28-2010 02:22 PM).] |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
abandoning of butterflies is surreal in its comcept, daark as is most of your work. The image of "those tattoos in the dust on the glass" is quite profound as was the following line. The wanting, the lonely wanting build into a type of insanity when you are constantly on the outside looking from within and are never able to touch the music. To mimic is a form of praise unless |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Incredible, as always. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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Bastet Member
since 2010-05-07
Posts 246 |
Love your imagery. Smooth, original, a real feast for the senses. Bravo! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
You are the Master of emotionally charged imagery, dear D.! You make us see with all of our senses. Love, Margherita  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
JP, thanks for the review amigo ___________ garapan, thanks so much _________________ bastet' thanks for the read _____________ ms mar, thanks lady friend |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
... no more flutters~ [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (12-29-2010 11:24 AM).] |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
babyblue.. hope you never lose the flutters..thanks for the read ms |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
DS...Your title and the first line got to my heart. Something in your words usually does. |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
...ah the silk of crysalis and cobwebs, left without a tear. Beautiful, Dark. ~K |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I'll never know how you make it look so easy, Datk. Your lines are like jewel boxes, with treasures for those who have the key to open them.....pleasures to read. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
It`s so beautiful and sad... there there, Daark. A |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms martie, thanks little neighbor. ______________ bro deer..thanks guy, you bless me ______________ kl, thanks lady friend for the eyes _________________ a'mary, thanks ms for the touch |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
I can only echo whats already been said. Enjoyed. -Trina. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This...likes me. HNY...friend! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms sinz...thanks lady __________ ms sun, thanks lady friend..HNY to you also |
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