Open Poetry #46 |
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XOx Uriah xOX Senior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403Virginia |
It's a cold rain falling down inside and outside there's no shelter from the storm It's a heavy chain, swallowing my pride but it's the only way that you're gonna get me warm There's a dark cloud covering our house My chasing rainbows ran away the sun I'm too proud to shut my mouth and I know full well I'm not the only one But anyway... I'll go ahead and say, "I'm sorry" I need you more than I need to win this fight If I wake up to find that you're still here tomorrow, I'll be satisfied Knowing I was right It's an ill wind blowing between us I'll hold my breath and hope that it subsides Just kiss me again and let's not fuss If your walls come down I've got no place to hide Let the storms pass They'll come 'round again But no bolt of lightning ever hit me like you do and storms don't last the way we do The only shelter that I have is you So anyway... I'll go ahead and say, "I'm sorry" I need you more than I need to win this fight If I wake up to find that you're still here tomorrow, I'll be satisfied Knowing I was right I'll be satisfied knowing I was right *** |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Reads like a song of remorse, and a darn good one too. Funny how in life, we push away the very people we want to be closer too isn't it? Strange us humans. Merry Christmas! |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
One of the better poems of capitulation I have ever read. You did the "I'm sorry" bit even as you explained that the world is a wondrous place, but has pitfalls in it and we are all too human and allow ourselves to fall into those pitfalls. Maybe I'm not making sense here, but you damn sure did with your poem. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Wow! That's a damn good left-handed apology, Larry. Ida |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
a very beautiful poem with conscious value of love...Great work. yann |
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XOx Uriah xOX Senior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403Virginia |
::smiles:: Thank you all You make me glad I think I said something |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Larry,always pleas do have something to say and say it.We are here to read. latearrival |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Larry The realization of needs in this is experience over self importance. Peculiar how we mature through the years isn't it? Great feeling in these verses! Eric ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Oh, this is very good, dear Larry! It is not easy to say "I am sorry", but, there is such power in it. You convey the importance of forgiveness so well. Love, Margherita |
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