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A Sestina of Park and Trees
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A Sestina of Park and Trees |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
LOL, I used to play around with this form in a more deliberate manner. Let's see how ad hoc sestina works out... ______________________ A Sestina of Park and Trees It is a day for a race, Yet all is calm among the trees. Voices hail from yonder park--- Seagulls, blue jays, human cries, And sunlight spills through morning Windows, calling all into place. Near silence, a poet's place. Acorns fall---squirrels on bark race To gather meals of morning From wild, unintentional trees. A child playing soccer cries As coaches bellow in the park. So what is there in a park, A chilly day, a sunlit place, That hearkens to children's cries And sanctifies our human race? Perhaps something in the trees, Or atop a tree-lined morning? Ah, now it is late morning. The church bells ring across the park, Fading into poet trees, Playing tunes all about the place. Sun across the sky will race, Enlightening the voices' cries. And how the afternoon cries! Warmer now than distant morning, Underneath the high mill-race, Another practice in the park, Another season in place Bends gratefully the gentle trees. Quite a collection, these trees. A murmured heart from acorn cries Standing, swirling, caught in place, Tuned to catch the light of morning, Needed room around the park. Poets will sing a gentle race. This place needs the morning. These trees must hear the cries. A park is not a race. |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
Very picturesque and full of description. I actually felt that I was there. |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Beautifully done. |
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Bastet Member
since 2010-05-07
Posts 246 |
This poem starts off with a bang. Very effective scene-setting with the contrast betweethe race and the calm of the trees. I'm not sure I agree with the "unintentional trees" but the "poet trees" are great. The second to last stanza is also very strong: the trees and the poet both need the "quiet" of the park, that is for sure. Very inspiring. Am still fascinated by your poetic process. |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
Thank you, Earl, Mysteria, and Bastet, for your kind and keen words. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
You painted a landscape painting with your words. To mimic is a form of praise unless |
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