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gilead
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0 posted 2010-12-16 03:14 PM


Perhaps I would have thrived fairly well
In the time of Wordsworth and Coleridge,
For I am, at heart, a romantic, having no passionate regard
For form, fashion, and the contrivance of periods.

I am a lover of all things deemed good by what
I think to be the higher senses of my being, and I love
To the deepest marrow of my soul, and should I weep,
I want to think my hurt to be without pretense, or self-pity.

I do love, and I fear, and I pray, for I have faith,
Even in the fog of the incomprehensible.



[This message has been edited by gilead (12-16-2010 05:35 PM).]

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JerryPat
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1 posted 2010-12-16 04:30 PM


To take on "the fog of the incomprehensible" is a mighty undertaking. The romantic in us finds it way to the forefront as cream rises to the top. Loving deeply and hurting unashamedly is the mark of goodness and grace.

http://swamprighter.wordpress.com/

gilead
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nevada, USA
2 posted 2010-12-16 05:37 PM


Thanks, Jerry. I think this mostly arose out of spending too much time viewing the news---trouble everywhere, and the most I can do is care.

Art

Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24
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Redlands,CA,USA
3 posted 2010-12-17 09:34 PM


What's not to like in the whole of this offering? Excellent, through and through.  But if I were to point to what I liked best, that second stanza is of the highest quality.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

Earl Brinkman
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since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan
4 posted 2010-12-18 06:56 AM


Having read my share of poems on this site I know when I come across a real gem.  This is such an occasion.
Prats
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since 2010-12-16
Posts 74

5 posted 2010-12-18 09:14 AM


i liked ur style of writing... this is a nice piece...

Heaven is not that place where you go when you die... it's that time in your life when you actually feel ALIVE!!!

Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
6 posted 2010-12-18 03:48 PM


"I do love, and I fear, and I pray,
for I have faith,
even in the fog of the incomprehensible."

I do love your poem, especially the above, and I think that just caring is actually doing a lot.  Keep on caring.

Helen


JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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7 posted 2010-12-20 12:52 PM


Enjoyed...James
ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
8 posted 2010-12-20 03:00 AM


Love the title of this piece.

This last part is precious.

"Even in the fog of the incomprehensible."

Good thoughts well expressed throughout.

Eric

My favorite oxymoron, "rap music"

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105
Watertown, NY
9 posted 2010-12-20 03:09 AM


I absolutely love the second stanza. Enjoyed.

-Trina.

Sticks and stones may break my bones, but chains and whips excite me...

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California
10 posted 2010-12-21 01:19 AM


I have already replied to this on the other site but it is excellent so I'm sending back to the top.
                            Ida

latearrival
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since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499
Florida
11 posted 2010-12-25 07:34 PM


You are needed in this world so yes,back to the top. latearrival
BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
12 posted 2010-12-29 05:51 PM


The fog says it all...I aspire to your kind of faith.

Lovely message here~

Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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Listening to every heart
13 posted 2010-12-29 06:54 PM


Your last stanza...
fits [or should fit] everyone...
for if we don't know that?
However could we write?



Happy New Year, Gilead!

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
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Canada eh.
14 posted 2010-12-29 08:47 PM


A wonderful write Sir.
Heart Hugs~Nancy

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