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Dead End |
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ILoveTheRain Member
since 2008-03-02
Posts 157GA 
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Unthought words from your sweet lips With selfish arogance blowing through the air Plunging every feeling for you Into the ground, deep with despair Uncertain about the rainy days Feeling lost in this mass darkness No matter the distance to run It’s always a mysterious, sinister dead end |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Well, now, this is a dark but wonderfully thought provoking piece. I think a new boyfriend is in order! That ending seems so down but I understand the direction. Good stuff! Eric This band's won two grammys for instrumentals. You don't know how that makes me feel as the lead singer! |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Hah! I know about dead ends. You captured the essence wonderfully. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Hey I think the guys are on the ball with this one (they have been around this block a time or two) You are young and love is all around you. Good write  Lori |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Sounds like a bad dream where you get no where fast. Enjoyed your poem, especially the visuals. |
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Prats Member
since 2010-12-16
Posts 74 |
Wow, nice poem... thats the state of my mind on some days... after facing rejection... Heaven is not that place where you go when you die... it's that time in your life when you actually feel ALIVE!!! |
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