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Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29
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0 posted 2010-12-13 01:49 AM


When the flow of what is meant to be
comes up against a wall
it stands there quite bemused
for at least a million years.

It studies every straight and curve,
every crack, bump, hole, and split
but none sufficient for a pass
and it prays for transformation.

Let it be as water so to seep
slowly, steadily,
through the seemingly impassable
and reach its destination.

But water?  No, no, no,
It's still of weight and measure
and a million years turns into two
while the flow thinks what to be.

So after two or maybe more
prayer discarded turns to slush
and sullies every new attempt
at change and transformation.

It's just the way it goes
when the flow can't see the way
so for me I pray for floods
to rise the flow above ~
and it does; it rises, up, up, up,
and like a dream supersedes
this reality!

Helen / 13 December 2010


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Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
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1 posted 2010-12-13 08:34 AM


I like your perspective here, good write......!
Lori

JerryPat
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since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991
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2 posted 2010-12-13 09:23 AM


You take on the world in all its crevasses and valleys, and you take it on quite wonderfully.

http://swamprighter.wordpress.com/

Honeybunch
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3 posted 2010-12-13 02:51 PM


Thank you so much, Lori and Jerry.  

Helen

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23
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By the Seaside
4 posted 2010-12-13 04:06 PM


You write so well!!  I especially enjoyed the uncercurrents.

Hugs, honey~

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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5 posted 2010-12-13 06:03 PM


You have such an ability to render philosophical questions poetically, dear Helen.

What do we know what is meant to be? And what is real? Welcome dreams! They are better than medicine.

Top write.

Love,
Margherita


Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
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South Africa
6 posted 2010-12-13 06:21 PM


Thank you, dear Bluesy.  There are always undercurrents, aren't there.  

Margherita - Oh, I just ramble but when it comes to knowing what was meant to be I think I have a pretty accurate take on that - probably accounts for a lot of what I write.  Dreams?  Yes, there are dreams and then there are "things" that I call dreams and in my experience there's a big difference between the two. That's as clear as mud.  

Love to you both and best wishes for a very happy festive season.

Helen

Martie
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7 posted 2010-12-13 09:52 PM


Hello Helen....As I read this I thought of something fluid, rising and finally spilling over the top...it would seem in a more spacial spirit sense, it did.  
ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
8 posted 2010-12-14 06:48 AM


Good morning Helen, had your tea yet?

My my that last verse sure caps off your meaning well.
Please don't tell those with heavy property insurance how those flood prayers go, or all of our rates will go up!!

Beautiful little philosophical gem. Thanks for sharing.

Eric

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