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The dream |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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you were there and I dreamnt' of open fields and rocked the baby beside the burnt house and broken windows and I wondered if you were happy? you asked if I was comfortable-- to the west the mountains seemed impossible, the climb was hard but we knew that -- the wind was harsh atop so I let it carry the paper and watched it float -- you laughed "it's only a dream" but I knew it was true I cried you felt nothing my tears fell empty I was dreaming, holding the baby in a field of purple beside the black house and broken window/s but, the rocking chair was empty |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Beautiful, woozy, longing, almost despairing? I love your poetic voice. My best~ Amaryllis A pile of scribbles here: |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Lady L... would always imagine you with a hat on the wide brimmed dark felt kind and your eyes are cool pools only part of the time reflecting enjoyed it lady |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
You have sort of a smirk in the photo (that's what I see and I ain't changing my mind) and the smirk kinda transposed itself in the poem. The first and last verses have a kinship, the only thing missing is is the other person and the baby. Very low keyed dramatics. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Amaryllis--appreciate you stopping in thank you....  --- My dark Stranger....  thankyou, you made me smile....yky! maybe you should try the hat on?? you know just to see if it fits...  [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (12-10-2010 10:46 AM).] |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
JerryPat---Hi hon, it was a dream, one I actually have had for the past 10 years, its starts and finishes just as the words describe.....I cant see the 3rd person, nor did I want to make them up.....appreciate your thoughts though thank you |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
How sad this is...and how wonderful it is to read you again, Lauren. I've missed you very much! How goes it? |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
fine writing ... as always ! |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
karilea, thank you-- you get it! secondhanddreampoet....appreciate you! thank you |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I see you dream in color, and they are wonderfully vivid. It's so nice to find your words here, Lauren. Wishing you joy and many blessings. |
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