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Going overboard |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India 
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Going overboard Barren! after harvest cracks decorate winter fields, Barbed wire fences twisting invisible fire shields, Fragile tiny roots tremble through every passing breeze, Dryness in dampness portraits notions of bitter freeze, Jobless scarecrows staring eyes bear a vacant look, Moles digging deeper holes, he’s an age old crook, Stray mouth dogs perform timely team hurdle again, Falling leaves are like failing electorate campaign, Misty stubbornness beholds every damp window sill, Sun’s hazy pretending glance through deep downhill, Opportunist! migrating gentle wings no longer flutter, Ever busy warm borrows stay still, there’s no mutter, Sudden chirping disturbing pleasant moments of clam, Came from junk backyard, hallow wood, wheels of scam, Grayish visiting little mimics constant restless jumping, Enhancing! Going overboard Mockingbird’s thumping. ©Prasad.N 3rd Dec 2010. All rights reserved to Prasad.N |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Impressive imagery, dear Prasad, that lingers on the reader's mind. You did a great job. Love, Margherita |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi Prasad ; a perfect portrait of nature, thanks for the priceless poem. rich in form and sound yann |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
You are able to give the reader so much to hang onto and see than most poets, my friend. Enjoyed this one even though "Jobless scarecrows staring eyes bear a vacant look," are one crop away from being homeless. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Bastet Member
since 2010-05-07
Posts 246 |
I love this poem! It takes me right back to India. I can see it, hear it, smell it. "Dryness in dampness" speaks so clearly as do a number of other phrases. A wonderful portrait of a country I love. Bravo and encore! |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Thank you for taking time to read and commenting, Dear Margherita. Thank you for your kind words, you are kind. Really appreciate it.  Thank you for taking time to read and commenting, Yann. Thank you for your kind words. Always welcome. Really appreciate it. Thank you for taking time to read and commenting, Jerry. Thank you for your perspective on this. Really appreciate it. Thank you for taking time to read and commenting, Bastet. Thank you for your kind words, glad you love the words and the country. Really appreciate it. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I could hear and feel it...I teach with many from India ( children and aides) I know they would appreciate your words if shown. M. |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Thank you for taking time to read and commenting, M. Sure you can show them this poem, if you wish too. Its an honour. Really appreciate it. "Hardwork pays in the long run" [This message has been edited by Prasad Nataraj (12-06-2010 03:33 AM).] |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
This is wonderful to experience... much late fall/early winter imagery... so very atmospheric, great writing, Prasad. Best~ Sharon |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
a pleasing read Prasad..well done! |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Thank you for taking time to read and commenting, Sharon. Glad you enjoyed the experience. Thank you for your kind words. Really appreciate it. Thank you for taking time to read and commenting, Dark. Thank you for your kind words. Really appreciate it. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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