Open Poetry #46 |
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For A Father |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy ![]() |
For A Father My heart pads upon silent trails tucked in the niche of safe anguish. For within the pain, is the pleasure the laying of hands, a killersoft smile. It is you, saunter and prance, that guides the rhythm of footfalls oil for emotions that often squeak and strong hooves to carry another's weight. Tell me, now, is fate scheduled or is it a cloud, shaped by events, torn and pulled by gales of desires? The answer is hidden beneath closed eyelids. My brotherhood, that longs to give, has run out of causes, but there is no greater than staying the ruin of love, and prevention of chaos. Still it remains, unspoiled, the love of you the desire to please you and force upon your lips a killersoft smile. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Hi Jeff~ I love this soft, wistful devotion. Your gift for sonics and simile is immense! I always enjoy reading your pieces. ![]() Best~ Amaryllis A pile of scribbles here: |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
"staying the ruin of love" That just about say everything there is to say here. Nice going. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(!$! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
'My brotherhood, that longs to give, has run out of causes, but there is no greater than staying the ruin of love, and prevention of chaos. Still it remains, unspoiled, the love of you the desire to please you and force upon your lips a killersoft smile" Liked it all very much but thought the above was a great climax and such an excellent verse. Eric |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
It is a touching piece, thought provoking too and absolutely beautifully written. Love, Margherita |
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